Talk:Exploration of Jupiter/GA1

GA Review
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Hi, I will be reviewing this article for GA. However, I needed to carefully read through it before I add comments, which I will be doing below. &mdash; Mattisse (Talk) 22:03, 11 November 2008 (UTC)
 * "The exploration of Jupiter has consisted of a few automated spacecraft missions made by NASA that have visited the planet since 1973." - "has consisted of" I don't like that but can't off hand think of something better. "Jupiter has been explored by" - I suppose you don't want to use that because of the article title.
 * "a few" - is this vague for a reason? You do not know the specific number?
 * "A large majority of the missions" - would "Most of the missions..." be better, as you have already said there are only a "few".
 * "Other missions planned at visiting the Jovian system are currently in their development phase." - perhaps - Plans for more missions to visit the Jovian system are being developed.
 * In fact, I see many prose issues through out the article. Do you want me to name them all here, or to try to fix some of them myself? &mdash; Mattisse  (Talk) 23:14, 11 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Please go ahead and be bold. Nergaal (talk) 23:33, 11 November 2008 (UTC)

&mdash; Mattisse (Talk) 01:24, 12 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I have no idea what this means: "Reaching Jupiter from Earth orbit requires an additional delta-V of 9.2 km/s,[1] which is comparable to the 9.7 km/s delta-V needed to reach low Earth orbit." It comes after a sentence that I sort of get because it is about velocity.
 * How about now? Nergaal (talk) 02:56, 12 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Why are there "the immense pressures within Jupiter", more so than other planets. What are these "immense pressures" due to?
 * Makes more sense now? Basically Jupiter is covered completely by "oceans". Nergaal (talk) 03:01, 12 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Do you agree with the changes I made to the article? (I tried not to change the meaning but I may have.) &mdash; Mattisse (Talk) 21:39, 12 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Yea, except for "[T]he belts must be... part. What is [T] supposed to mean? Nergaal (talk) 22:17, 12 November 2008 (UTC)
 * As I've said it looks ok, except probably for the typo I listed here "[T]he"
 * That is to make the first letter a capital so that it is a sentence. I will change it back as it is not a big deal! &mdash; Mattisse  (Talk) 16:53, 13 November 2008 (UTC)

 Final GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail: