Talk:Explorers on the Moon/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 11:31, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

I will review this article. Thank you. — Ssven2  Speak 2 me 11:31, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Comments

 * Lede
 * "Explorers on the Moon (French: On a marché sur la Lune) is the seventeenth of The Adventures of Tintin, " — Seventeenth what?
 * Volume! I have no idea how I missed that. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
 * "who are aboard a manner rocket mission to the moon." — Do you mean "manned rocket"? Sounds better than "manner rocket", which might make the reader feel that the rocket lacks mannerisms! LOL.
 * Well spotted! Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
 * "of the story. The story was" — Avoid repetition of story.
 * I've gone with "volume" here although would be up for any alternative suggestions. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)


 * Synopsis
 * "disrupting the artificial gravity and sending everyone floating" — Wikilinks for "artificial gravity" and "floating" could be better for those readers who are not wholly aware of the two terms. For clarity's sake.
 * Good point! I've added a link to the former although could not find an appropriate link for "floating". Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Found the link for 'floating' myself. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 03:13, 25 September 2015 (UTC)


 * A simpler word for "fissure" would be good as the word seems a tad complicated. Maybe chasm?
 * I've gone with chasm, although I think that it is probably on a similar level to fissure. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Actually, chasm is a synonym of fissure, which sounded more scientific and some readers might not understand it well. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 03:13, 25 September 2015 (UTC)


 * History
 * "Publishers were unhappy" — Who? Casterman or Turner and Cooper?
 * That would be Casterman. I've changed it. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Thats about it from me. Once again, great job, Midnightblueowl. Do ping me when you have resolved the comments. — Ssven2  Speak 2 me 12:24, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
 * That's great Ssven2 ; many thanks! Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Thank you for resolving them, Midnightblueowl. Congratulations! — Ssven2  Speak 2 me 03:15, 25 September 2015 (UTC)