Talk:Export-oriented employment/Archives/2016

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Ok, so overall I think your content is really great. You've got the right information and it's interesting and relevant. I have a few grammatical things below. This is in the first paragraph thing, and I;m not quite sure what you mnea. I think you have a reproduced sentence somewhere int here or meant to delete it, etc. "produce goods and services for sale in other countries. is a process whereby multinational firms or capital influence or sustain gender roles in order earn profits in a factory setting.[1] " *Lesser developed countries, not less developed. This is a simple fix, but generally it is lesser developed.

In history, and women as the preferred labor force, I think it is sounding too much like an essay. You bring up people and their corresponding theories as support which is good…but its the form that needs to change for this wiki page. If you introduce a theory and its author, bring it up and define it. Then outline out in fits in the section. But I would avoid having that support be the push for the idea, because you're not arguing anything, only presenting. Which is totally opposite of the way we are normally writing (undergrad and grad), but there's no analysis or argument in this wiki business. I would just take out some of the "Standing characterizes, Standing notes" stuff and just state it as fact and then have the citation. That's more the spirit of wiki (that's the spirit!). Try to bring the information forward as part of your section to help define it, but only as part of the whole. Anyhow, if you have more questions, message me and I can explain what I mean further. U0552803 (talk) 22:05, 18 April 2014 (UTC)

Hi, Thanks for your help! I fixed the problem with the first sentence, and I have and will continue try to correct the “lesser developed” problem as it occurs. I have also tried to fix (and will continue to change) the essay-like feel to the work and avoid e.g. “Standing says..” related problems.CodyG123 (talk) 21:57, 26 April 2014 (UTC)