Talk:Ezra Johnson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri (talk · contribs) 00:39, 3 January 2014 (UTC)


 * I'll take this. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 00:39, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

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Comments: Overall, this was a really nice article and there are only some minor issues that stand in the way of it being passed. And not much of it is really a big deal, some minor word choices, flow and a matter of small numbers being inconsistently written out only to be give numerically later. Overall, this article has a few minor wording issues, but it is detailed and focused, giving enough context to both the major and more minor events throughout his career. I think this will be an easy pass provided some slight fixes. Placing it on hold. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 06:13, 6 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Disambig links: OK
 * Reference check: OK
 * "He earned a Pro Bowl berth in 1978 after leading the league in sacks with 20.5." Not sure what a "berth" is, but the end of the sentence is awkward "with 20.5 sacks." perhaps?
 * I reworded "berth" as it means clinched, and finished the second,
 * " including one incident in which he ate a hot dog while sitting on the bench during a preseason game" - this might sound like a tone issue... but while it is a major matter from what spawned of it, I think the wording could be altered. It doesn't seem serious, but it was.
 * Infamous incident still talked about today, really don't want to further expand the lead with it. Secret account 17:33, 7 January 2014 (UTC)
 * "and bounced around with several teams before retiring" - please change "bounced around".
 * Reworded. Secret account 17:33, 7 January 2014 (UTC)
 * " Despite his adverse relationship with the team at times, Johnson was elected to the Green Bay Packers Hall of Fame in 1997." Sentence structure is a little weak and I do not like using the word "Despite" as an opener. "Though Johnson's relationship with the team was imperfect, he was elected to the Green Bay Packers Hall of Fame in 1997." Maybe?
 * College career could be a little bigger, I understand his size was a factor, but was there any commentary or data that could be used to fill this out a bit more?
 * I looked and I couldn't find anything relevant, it was the size of the college program that made it a factor, not him. Secret account 17:33, 7 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Okay, just was wondering - I like to test the waters a bit and ask somewhat obvious questions to make sure that nothing was overlooked. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 06:03, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
 * " because of lack of major college experience" - of (word) of - is a bit weird sounding, even though I think it could be resolved with some tinkering. "...his small size and lack of college experience..." - Why is "major" needed anyways?
 * He played for a small school by college football standards, a Division II school, should I link it instead? Secret account 17:33, 7 January 2014 (UTC)
 * It was more the wording, but additional nuance and details... true to form the major college experience line was indeed used later in reference to Johnson in the Koch matter, but his "lack of experience from playing in a Morris Brown, a small Division II school..." might be the type of wording that could go further. Especially since I don't see the school being attributed as a Division II school in the text. It also gives added context to why Johnson's pick was both a gamble and unexpected in the first round. It is a really tiny matter not going to impact the GA process, but I know improving the article comes first to you, if you don't have any good ideas on fixing it now, just let it stew for a bit and I could pass it. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 06:03, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
 * " as the backup for Alden Roche at defensive end." - Seems a bit awkward to me.
 * "It was a decision which confused the local media as Johnson had been the starter since 1978. Merrill, who was released by the Cincinnati Bengals and claimed off waivers by the Packers, was considered by the team as the better, more consistent interior lineman against the run." - Too much for one sentence, I think, but restructuring might fix it.
 * Some of the numbers run into WP:ORDINAL, with "missing 10 of the first 11 games", but I think it's the "three and a half sacks" that touched my little alarm off, might be easier to fix that one written notation instead.
 * "He played in 192 games in his career, having officially 55.5 quarterback sacks (99 when his unofficial totals are added).[4]" - I like paragraphs to end strong when they close the career of an individual, I suggestion opening this with "Throughout Johnson's 192 game career..." Though it is just another idea.
 * The remaining issues are rather trivial and cannot impede its passage at this point, rather than quibble over word choice when the standards are met, I'll pass this now. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 04:32, 11 January 2014 (UTC)


 * Why no profile pictures are added to his infobox? Is there copyright issue? Forbidden User (talk) 11:03, 4 May 2014 (UTC)