Talk:Faith (Pop Smoke album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 22:32, 19 September 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 22:32, 19 September 2022 (UTC)

An Earwig run showed up some issues that led me to start with spotchecks:
 * FN 20 cites "lurching synths, choral flourishes, and interspersed spoken testimonials". The source has the identical wording.
 * FN 20 cites ""Coupe" has the use of looping 808's, while the lyrics discuss the themes of celebrity excess." The source has '“Coupe" and "What’s Crackin” encase the all-too-familiar themes of celebrity excess and rampant materialism within looping 808’s'.  This is too closely paraphrased.
 * FN 39 cites "Pop Smoke raps about attacking his enemies, taking their jewelry" 39 has "jumping out on opps and taking their jewelry" -- this is too closely paraphrased.
 * FN 65 cites ""Mr. Jones" featuring Anuel AA is a remixed version of the original track." I can't find this in the cited source.
 * FN 61 cites "The author concludes that when Pop Smoke writes his lyrics, he isn't thinking about the 'masses'; instead, he is thinking about the people in his hometown of Brooklyn, New York. He's aiming for an audience that will want to hear his distinct lyrics and voice". The source has "From my perspective, he’s not thinking about the “masses” when he writes his lyrics; he’s thinking about the people from his home in Brooklyn, New York. He is literally targeting the audience who will most likely want to hear his style and unique lyricism."  This is far too closely paraphrased.

I'm going to fail this nomination; every single spotcheck has problems. Before renominating, please go through the article and make sure there are no more problems like this. However, I would also suggest that you think about approaching the article differently. It looks as if what you've done is searched for sources, and for each source you found you've plucked out the relevant material and dropped it into the article at the appropriate place. The way the citations are set up tells me that's how it was done, with a cite every few words in many places. It's almost impossible to write good prose that way. I think if you read the sources and then write sections in your own words, using the sources to support what you write, it will be far more readable. I have to say I would have considered failing the article on prose if the spotcheck issues had not stopped me from going further; it's very fragmented. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 23:47, 19 September 2022 (UTC)