Talk:Fake Love (BTS song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LOVI33 (talk · contribs) 18:17, 9 September 2020 (UTC)

Hey Ashleyyoursmile! Thanks for your amazing "Kiss and Make Up" review. I will review this in return. LOVI 33  18:17, 9 September 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good, the cover arts just need alt text.
 * I would advise against using unnecessary brackets: "is a song recorded in two languages (Korean and Japanese) by South Korean boy band BTS" → "is a song by South Korean boy band BTS, recorded in both Korean and Japanese."
 * This wording has been used in a number of GAs that I wrote earlier such as Mic Drop (song), DNA (BTS song) and Blood Sweat and Tears (song); I prefer to keep it this way if that works for you.


 * "The Korean version was released on May 18, 2018, as the lead single from the band's third studio album Love Yourself: Tear (2018) by Big Hit Entertainment." → "The Korean version was released through Big Hit Entertainment on May 18, 2018, as the lead single from the band's third studio album Love Yourself: Tear (2018)."
 * "in that country" → "in the country"
 * "A "Rocking Vibe" remix of the track was released" → "A remix, titled "Rocking Vibe", was released"
 * "Two music videos for the single were directed by YongSeok Choi, one for the original version and one for the remix" → "Music videos for both the remix and original version were released; both were directed by YongSeok Choi."
 * "Both" would be repeated twice in that case and is reading awkward. I changed one for the original version and one for the remix to one for the original version and another for the remix, if that helps.

✅ Everything else
 * "The debut of" – does this mean the song's debut performance? If so, specify this.

Background and release
✅ all
 * "On June 12," → "On June 12 of that year,"
 * "serviced "Fake Love" to" → "serviced the song to"
 * "song-writing" → "songwriting"

Music and lyrics
✅ all
 * [9][23][24][25][26][27]: too many refs at the end of the sentence, split them up.
 * Target ambient to Ambient music
 * Target synth to Synthesizer
 * "and synthesizer" → "and synthesizers", removing the target

Critical reception

 * Looks Good! Great job excluding repetition from the section, it can be hard sometimes.
 * Thank you! :)

Commercial performance
✅ all
 * "also performed identically on the component Download Chart" Specify that it just peaked at number 1 on the chart. The way it is written right now make is seem like it also debuted at number 6 and peaked at 1.
 * "The single remained in the top five for five" → "The single remained in the top five of the digital chart for five" for specifications
 * "their first top-ten on the chart" → "their first top-ten entry on the chart"

Music videos
✅
 * "(01:00 PST)" Usually for these, UTC is used as it is a universal time. I would recommend changing it to UTC.
 * Great writing for the synopsis!

Live performances
✅
 * Image needs alt text

Track listing
✅
 * Looks good, I would just add total lengths for listings with more than one track.

Credits and personnel
✅
 * Per WP:OVERLINK, remove targets on BTS, "Hitman" Bang, RM, KM-Markit, and Jungkook

Charts

 * Looks good!

Certifications

 * Looks good!

Release history
✅
 * "Country" → "Region"

Final comments and verdict

 * , another amazingly well written article., Just a few fixes and this will be ready for GA! LOVI  33  01:47, 12 September 2020 (UTC)
 * LOVI33, thank you so much for reviewing this. I have mostly addressed all concerns, except a few where I've left comments. Please let me know what you think. -- Ashley  yoursmile!  12:19, 13 September 2020 (UTC)
 * , eveything looks good, accept the second album cover still needs alt text. When that is added I will pass this. LOVI  33  16:38, 13 September 2020 (UTC)
 * User:LOVI33, I made some small edits. For instance, I see now that I agree with your first comment about the lead, and while User:Ashleyyoursmile prefers it differently, I disagree. In general the article is too full of detail and wikilinks, and a few grammatical errors were found among the verbosity. It needs another good read. BTW, can you adjust the colors in your signature? I can barely read your name. Thank you, Drmies (talk) 16:50, 13 September 2020 (UTC)
 * thanks for your copyedit. I will be sure to do that. I have added the alt text myself so, thats a ✅. LOVI  33  17:18, 13 September 2020 (UTC)