Talk:Fantasy (Mariah Carey song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:21, 16 November 2010 (UTC)

I suppose with a song every two days, someone had better get reviewing :D... Adabow (talk · contribs) 05:21, 16 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Hahahahah You're the best Adabow! :)-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   05:46, 16 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Passed now! Adabow (talk · contribs) 02:23, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

Lead

 * When you use an acronym (O.D.B.) you need to indicate this the this time you use it
 * You mention Ol' Dirty Bastard in first paragraph - use indicate O.D.B. here first. Adabow (talk · contribs) 01:13, 17 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Done-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:52, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Oh, and you haven't mentioned the cover art in the body of the article Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:24, 16 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Done its in the "Background" section-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:52, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * I still can't see it... Adabow (talk · contribs) 02:02, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

Background

 * Link contemporary R&B and hip-hop
 * "Soon after, Carey presented Dave Hall with the demo, and began working on the song." - rewrite
 * "Afterwards, Carey gave then husband and head of Columbia, Tommy Mottola the rough demo, only to find he too was very happy with the song." - rewrite

Composition

 * More linking, please
 * Shouldn't 'G ♭ major' link to G-flat major?

Critical reception

 * first word is missing closing quote mark
 * ..."with "Fantasy," Ms. Carey glides... → ..."with 'Fantasy', Ms. Carey glides...
 * Can't I was told to never alter a direct quote. -- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:53, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Minimal change to quotes is fine. See MOS:QUOTE. Adabow (talk · contribs) 02:01, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * There have got to be more reviews. I won't hold the GAN up for this, but before you send this to FAC go to the library and look through some old magazines and newspapers
 * I really haven't been ale to find. As I told you, its to my benefit to have more, its not like I'm lazy.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:53, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Lol wasn't saying that. Just thought you mightn't have thought of offline sources. Adabow (talk · contribs) 02:01, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

Chart performance

 * "It was also ranked at number fifteen on the Hot 100 decade-end charts." → It was also ranked at number fifteen on the Hot 100 decade-end chart for the 1990s.
 * Done-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:56, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * "In Canada, the song debuted on the RPM Singles Chart..." then later: "In Canada, "Fantasy" peaked at number one and remained at the top of the Canadian Singles Chart" - explain why there are two charts, and don't use "In Canada..." twice
 * You have RPM chart here, and CSC in 'Charts' section


 * Done
 * Citation for Euro charts?
 * Removed was there from before. Just never removed it.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:56, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * "It peaked within the top-five in Belgium (Wallonia), Finland, France (silver) and the United Kingdom (silver); and in the top-ten in Belgium (Flander), The Netherlands, Ireland, Norway and Switzerland." - you could merge this with the statement about Euro charts. Rewrite with less use of brackets, and link to the charts. Oh, and Flander is Flanders :)
 * Done :)-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:56, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

Music video

 * "the video begins with Carey exploring an amusement park (Playland, located in Rye, New York)..." - take these details out of the brackets, maybe, 'Filmed in Playland, Rye, the video begins with Carey exploring an amusement park, on roller blades and riding on a roller coaster.'
 * 'allot' should be 'a lot'
 * Link 'clown'
 * The remix is mentioned here, so maybe the 'Remixes' section should come before it?
 * Done-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:56, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

Remixes

 * '"Genius of Love" sample were emphasized & the bridge...' don't use a '&'
 * Done-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:56, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * "There is a version.....There is a version..." - mix it up a bit
 * Done-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:56, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Still says 'There is a version omitting Ol' Dirty Bastard's verses.[21] There is another version of this remix called the "Bad Boy Fantasy Remix"'
 * "The remix garnered positive reviews" - which remix?
 * "Additionally, he went to proclaim the song "her best" writing "At her best,..." - seems awkward. Maybe you could remove the quote marks around "her best"? Commas needed after 'her best' and 'writing'
 * Link Donna Summer and Vicki Sue Robinson

Live performances

 * Link 23rd Annual American Music Awards
 * Italicise Top of the Pops

Formats and track listings

 * Sources?
 * You could also col-2 these
 * Done-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:57, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

Charts

 * Links?
 * <sPick either succession boxes or 'See also' links. Not both
 * I took off the link in the succession box so they are both not present.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:57, 17 November 2010 (UTC)
 * You need to have either all succession boxes and no see alsos, or no succ boxes and all see alsos