Talk:Fascinated (Ivy song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:00, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

Soon... Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:00, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * indie rock band → genre is not needed
 * (2011). It was issued in the United States on July 26, 2011 as a digital download by Nettwerk. → (2011), with it being made available for digital download on July 26, 2011 through Nettwerk in the United States.
 * The single was written → The recording was written
 * received a mixed → remove "a"
 * Appreciated for its "catchiness" → While being appreciated for being catchy
 * a different reviewer was critical for the song containing → a different reviewer criticized the song for containing
 * A music video → An accompanying music video
 * and features → featuring

Background and composition

 * with the news that a song → with news concerning a song
 * by Ivy → by the members of Ivy
 * assistance from → assistance being credited to
 * Described → Being described
 * pop" that → pop" vibe that
 * Keyboards accompany the song's melody → The recording incorporates keyboards in its instrumentation
 * chorus; PopMatters's → make two sentences here.

Critical reception

 * came alongside a mixed → was met with mixed
 * and stated → stating that
 * Bergstrom from PopMatters → PopMatters's Bergstrom (word rep.)
 * He continued by questioning → The reviewer continued questioning
 * Since we know the sex of the reviewer in question, I think this may sound a bit too much for an encyclopedia. Carbrera (talk) 17:05, 17 September 2016 (UTC)


 * chorus' → refrain's

Music video

 * A music video → An accompanying music video
 * 2011, via → Remove comma
 * The video was directed → The visual was directed (word rep.)
 * helped create → helped creating
 * the trio → the band
 * camera, as → remove comma
 * for the visual's entirety → for the rest of the clip
 * and ends → with it ending
 * individual using the keyboard → using the keyboard individually
 * This doesn't really make sense to me. Carbrera (talk) 17:08, 17 September 2016 (UTC)


 * vibe", through → remove comma

Track listings and formats

 * Remove "and formats" from the title.

Credits and personnel

 * Credits and personnel adapted from All Hours liner notes and Ivy's AllMusic discography → Credits adapted from the liner notes of All Hours and Ivy's discography on AllMusic

Release history

 * Unlink label

Outcome
for 7 days. Good luck with editing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Finished with everything. Thanks so much! Carbrera (talk) 17:08, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Passing Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:31, 17 September 2016 (UTC)