Talk:Fatimid invasion of Egypt (914–915)

Need help for GA review of Japanese Wikipedia
Hello. I am an author of the Japanese Wikipedia. I have translated this article and currently the article is in review for GA, but I need someone's help as I have received some requests that I cannot handle on my own. If the author of this English article can improve on the following, it will pass the process.
 * Invasion of Egypt
 * al-Kindi is mentioned as a source in the opening passage, but al-Kindi linked to is a 9th century person, so it would be impossible to record the events of this article. There must be a mistake.


 * Conquest of the Cyrenaica
 * Is the following account based on Sunni sources? If possible I would like to write this clearly. If it is unclear, I will not describe it.
 * Thus Habasa forced the local pigeon merchants to roast and eat their ware, suspecting them of using their birds to spy for the Abbasids. He urged the members of the local Arab militia (the jund) to enroll in the Fatimid army, while imposing considerable financial levies on the town's population.


 * Fatimid occupation of Fayyum and defeat at Giza
 * Could you please include references for the following two sentences? A reviewer said that the following sentences are original research expressions (which I don't think so) and therefore it is necessary to at least specify which reference the wording is taken from.
 * Fatimid sources unanimously attribute this defeat to Habasa, who fled the battlefield, despite al-Qa'im's exhortations to stand firm.
 * The pro-Fatimid accounts maintain that al-Qa'im launched three attacks on the enemy and caused many casualties, but these embellishments cannot hide the fact that the battle was a disaster.
 * I think the best response would be to state for every sentence in this paragraph which source each statement is based on, Lev 1988, p. 188 or Halm 1991, p. 185 (or both).


 * Analysis
 * The opening passage of the final paragraph states that 'Michael Jan de Goeje, who first studied the Qarmatians of Bahrayn', but from checking the source (Madelung 1996, pp. 22–23, 29ff.), it appears that 'first' is not mentioned. Should I simply omit the 'first' description? If there are other sources on which to base this, let me know.

If possible, I would like to solve all these questions on my own, but I can't afford to have the sources at hand, so please forgive me for having to ask for help from the original author. I would be grateful for your cooperation. Los viajeros 77 (talk) 06:23, 9 June 2022 (UTC)