Talk:February 1983 North American blizzard/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 07:00, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

Almost there. Ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:32, 17 March 2024 (UTC)


 * , all your comments addressed below! :) ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)


 * I'll definitely do a GA review on one of your GA nominations in the next week or so! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)

Lead

 * The low then emerged over the Atlantic Ocean near the Georgia–South Carolina border, and later developed and intensified into a cyclone as it moved parallel along the East Coast of the United States. Remove comma (WP:CINS) or change to ", later developing and intensifying..."
 * ✅! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)


 * The cyclone then moved northward, while producing blizzard conditions Remove comma
 * ✅! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)

Synopsis

 * On February 9, a low-pressure area formed, which was centered over eastern Texas and along the Texas-Gulf of Mexico coastline. Remove "which was"
 * ✅! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)


 * The low then progressed eastward across the Gulf the next day, before moving across the Southeastern United States and emerging Remove comma.
 * ✅! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Vary sentence beginnings: too much "The low then"...
 * ✅, re-worded or removed a few! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)

Preparations and impact

 * More information on the Marine Electric being unseaworthy and the legacy of that accident might improve context.
 * ✅, I did include a bit more information on the Marine Electric here, including the aftermath and legacy of the sinking, with information and a reference thrown in from the ship's article! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Some areas in Frederick and Montgomery counties in Maryland had its heaviest snowfall should be their heaviest snowfall
 * ✅! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)


 * there were more than 34,000 power outages across should be reworded to note that 34,000 homes without power, not 34,000 separate outages
 * ✅! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)


 * The blizzard also produced 21 inches (53 cm) in Springfield, Massachusetts, which is the third-highest snowfall total there since 1905 as of 2013. ... The blizzard also stranded thousands of people at an Aerosmith concert in Springfield, Massachusetts. These two items belong together thematically, not separated by multiple sentences.
 * ✅! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Consider using "also" less.
 * ✅! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)

Tornado outbreak

 * Is "golfball" (one word) normal for this type of analysis?
 * Well, "golfball" isn't one word, I highly doubt it's normal for analysis. ✅! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)

Sourcing and spot checks

 * 6: NWS Charleston WV summary of the 1983 nor'easter. Used four times; all tracks. ✅
 * 11: WGAL article. By the way, I did some looking and found only a handful of references that used this name at first, the earliest from 2007 in New Jersey. The nickname and second-highest claim check out. ✅
 * 13: WHSV article: According to The Breeze from JMU, it was the first time classes were canceled since the March 1962 snow storm. ✅
 * 20: WaPo article contains the 16.4 inches total. ✅
 * 33: This is kind of a meh source, being a personal recollection. I'll throw you a bone and clip something relevant to fortify this: (publication should be The Sunday Republican). Apparently Steven Tyler was late because of the storm in New York. ✅
 * ✅, replaced the Q105.7 reference, also added GenealogyBank as well to the reference! ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 02:25, 18 March 2024 (UTC)


 * 58: SDP notes tornado ripped billboards, crossed SH 156. ✅
 * 63: Destruction of house; doesn't work alone but in conjunction with the others probably. 64 has more of these details. ✅

Images
There are three images. Two are maps that are PD-USGov from the National Weather Service. The third apparently was released into the public domain by the Coast Guard.