Talk:Fences and Windows/GA1

GA Review
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As this is my first GA review, feel free to comment/ask me questions! Cheers.  Im per a t § r (Talk)  15:51, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

GA Philosophy
As with most GA Reviewers, I tend to break each individual section down to compose the overall article's quality. This way, you will be able to edit specifically the parts where I feel there are problems.  Im per a t § r (Talk)  15:51, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Lead

 * "Reviews of the book were mixed, some positive and others negative."
 * If the review is mixed, then of course it's going to have both positive and negative...
 * I see plenty of opportunity for Wikilinks on the second paragraph.
 * Two of the articles were singled out by several reviewers as being the exceptional. One, "America is not a Hamburger", discusses the US State Department's attempt to re-brand America's image overseas. The second, "The Brutal Calculus of Suffering", discusses media portrayals of war.
 * Should be moved to the Publication and reception section
 * The fences represent exclusion and barriers while the windows are opportunities for expressing alternative ideas.
 * Again, too specific; move down to one of the sections below.

Background

 * (m) wrong verb tense which is confusing.

Styles and Themes

 * Should be expanded.
 * Link; I don't see a single Wikilink

Publication and Reception

 * Two chapters were singled out as being exceptionally well-done: Los Angeles Times article "America is not a Hamburger" describing the US State Department's attempt to re-brand the USA rather than describing the US State Department's belief that rising anti-Americanism was a misunderstanding rather than a reaction to American policy directions, and Klein's October 2001 speech at a journalism conference in Stockholm, "The Brutal Calculus of Suffering" contrasting the media depictions of American versus non-American deaths.
 * Reword and split up.
 * Eliminate the two red links
 * Several opportunities for Linkage within the first two paragraphs (Optional)