Talk:Fernanda Lima/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 23:08, 14 February 2014 (UTC)

I will be failing this article as a GAN, as the criteria are not satisfied. Mainly, I do not feel the article is well written (criteria 1), well referenced (2), or comprehensive enough to satisfy criteria 3.


 * The grammar needs a complete repair; you might want to run this by the good folks at WP:GOCE before coming back to GAN, but some other suggestions/specific problems.


 * "One of three children - she has two brothers, Rodrigo and Rafael - of two professors of physical education, as a child, she showed interest in journalism and the art world, creating choreographies prepared at parties and family gatherings. " Watch your run-on sentences, and add sources.
 * Sources not in English should be explicitly marked as such.
 * A full half of the "Modelling" section has nothing at all to do with modelling.
 * "Fernanda" should be very rare in the text and image captions; encyclopedic tone dictates use of last names.
 * There is lots and lots of unsourced material here.
 * "to replace Angélica of Vídeo Game, presenting the program Vídeo Show, during pregnancy and maternity leave of the titular host." If it were "titular", the name of the host would be in the name of the show. Is this the word you meant?
 * Really need to cover critical reaction to her work.
 * The lead photo has her wearing six nomination medals for the International Emmy Awards... so where are her awards or nominations discussed in the text?
 * This World Cup section is WP:UNDUE as it stands; this one side of her life shouldn't be half the prose of the article. Parts of it also lack "In January 2014, she was the official host of the Ballon d'Or of FIFA for Dutch football player Ruud Gullit."... um, given Gullit didn't win the award, I've no idea what this means.
 * "a business partner in a restaurant in São Paulo, a vegetarian, and a practitioner of yoga." Yet more unsourced stuff. I won't tag bomb this, but I could add 20 or more  tags.
 * Portal links don't belong with the filmography.


 * This needs lots of work, lots of new content, and a through copyedit after that new content is added. As I said, I am failing this article; there could be a GA here someday, but it needs quite a bit of work. Courcelles 23:08, 14 February 2014 (UTC)