Talk:Fight Club (The X-Files)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: DAP388 (talk · contribs) 18:14, 15 June 2012 (UTC)

I will review this article, as I love Kathy Griffin. —DAP388 (talk) 18:14, 15 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "The episode is a "Monster-of-the-Week" story, unconnected to the series' wider mythology." -> "The episode plot serves as a "Monster-of-the-week" story, which is unconnected to the series' wider mythology."


 * Plot
 * Mormon should be capitalized, as it describes a particular social and cultural group.
 * "The second woman yells at them to go away and the two men, inexplicably, get into a fight in the woman's front yard." Are they fighting in the first or second woman's yard?
 * "They eventually injure themselves so much that they are put in critical condition." This doesn't make sense. Try this, "They are severely injured after the gruesome mauling."
 * "Zupanic and Saperstein meet at a bar to exchange money and an earthquake occurs in the bar before Lulu walks in." -> "A second earthquake occurs as Lulu prepares to walk in on Zupanic and Saperstein exchanging money."
 * "Lulu and Betty see each other in the bar and the glass in the bar begins breaking again before both women leave." "Bar" is used pretty repetitiously here. How about use some substitutes like "building"?
 * "Damphouse is revealed to be insane and clinically angry all the time." ->"Damphouse is revealed to be mentally insane, and is always in a fit of rage."


 * Production
 * The comma after many is not necessary.


 * Reception
 * Be more creative with the wording. Instead of "wrote", why not use terms like "opined", "asserted", and "said"?

That's it. On hold for seven days. —DAP388 (talk) 21:37, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much for your review. I believe I have addressed all the issues!--Gen. Quon (talk) 03:39, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Happy to pass this one. :) —DAP388 (talk) 17:27, 20 June 2012 (UTC)