Talk:Finn the Human (Adventure Time episode)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 01:56, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

Nominator: Gen. Quon   (Talk)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  01:56, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written
 * a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:.
 * b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

Check for WP:LEAD:


 * 1) Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  ✅
 * 2) Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  ✅
 * 3) Check for Introductory text:  ✅
 * 4) * Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO): ✅
 * 5) ** Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... with his family and his dog, Jake on a farm." (not a concise summary of the Plot section, few important points like events after the "wish" and the "crown" are not in the lead, while "Finn is then warped ... Jake on a farm" is not in the body.)
 * 6) ** Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... and Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (summarised well in the lead)
 * 7) ** Major Point 3: Reception ""Finn the Human" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaims, with many critics writing that the episode was a creative challenge." (not a concise summary of the Reception section)
 * 8) * Check for Relative emphasis: ✅
 * 9) ** Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... with his family and his dog, Jake on a farm." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
 * 10) ** Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... and Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
 * 11) ** Major Point 3: Reception ""Finn the Human" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaims, with many critics writing that the episode was a creative challenge." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body)
 * 12) * Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN): ✅
 * 13) ** Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE): ✅
 * 14) *** ""Finn the Human" is the fifth season premiere of the American animated television series Adventure Time.
 * 15) ** Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE): ✅
 * 16) ** Check for Proper names and titles: ✅
 * 17) ** Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None
 * 18) ** Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None
 * 19) ** Check for Pronunciation: None
 * 20) ** Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK): ✅
 * 21) ** Check for Biographies: NA
 * 22) ** Check for Organisms: NA
 * 23) Check for Biographies of living persons:  NA
 * 24) Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  ✅
 * 25) * Check for Non-English titles:
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 * 28) Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  ✅
 * 29) Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER):  None

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Check for WP:LAYOUT: ✅


 * 1) Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  ✅
 * 2) * Check for Headings and sections: ✅
 * 3) * Check for Section templates and summary style: ✅
 * 4) * Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS): ✅
 * 5) ** Short paragraphs and single sentences generally do not warrant their own subheading. Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. (WP:BETTER)
 * 6) ** Merge Background and Events sections to fix the short paragraph "In the fourth season finale, Finn and Jake are tricked by the Lich—disguised as the hero Billy—into opening a portal to the multiverse by using the Enchiridion. After the Lich passes through, Finn and Jake give chase, and a mysterious new reality is created.".
 * 7) ** Fix ""Finn the Human" first aired on Cartoon Network ... "Jake the Dog". the episode ... at the time of the airing." in the Reception section. There is also a 1a issue: the should be The.
 * 8) ** Fix "After being pulled into the portal, ... into the reality created by his wish." in the Events section.
 * 9) Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  ✅
 * 10) * Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER): ✅
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 * 12) * Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None
 * 13) * Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR): ✅
 * 14) * Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None
 * 15) * Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL): None
 * 16) * Check for Links to sister projects: None
 * 17) * Check for Navigation templates: ✅
 * 18) Check for Formatting:  ✅
 * 19) * Check for Images (WP:LAYIM): ✅
 * 20) * Check for Links: ✅
 * 21) * Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE): ✅

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Check for WP:WTW: ✅


 * 1) Check for Words that may introduce bias:  ✅
 * 2) * Check for Puffery (WP:PEA): ✅
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 * 5) * Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED): ✅
 * 6) * Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED): ✅
 * 7) * Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY): ✅
 * 8) Check for Expressions that lack precision:  ✅
 * 9) * Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM): ✅
 * 10) * Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM): ✅
 * 11) * Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME): ✅
 * 12) * Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None
 * 13) Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  None

Check for WP:MOSFICT: ✅


 * 1) Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  ✅
 * 2) * Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI): ✅
 * 3) * Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT): ✅

None


 * Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE):
 * Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research
 * a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
 * b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

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Check for WP:RS: ✅


 * 1) Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING):  (not contentious) ✅
 * 2) * Is it contentious?: No
 * 3) * Does the ref indeed support the material?:
 * 4) Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  ✅
 * 5) * Who is the author?:
 * 6) ** Seibert, Fred (Frederator Studios)
 * 7) ** Sava, Oliver (The Onion)
 * 8) ** Larry Leichliter (Cartoon Network)
 * 9) ** Stopera, Dave (BuzzFeed)
 * 10) ** Moynihan, Jesse (JesseMoynihan.com)
 * 11) ** Bibel, Sara (Zap2it)
 * 12) ** Kohn, Eric (Snagfilms)
 * 13) * Does the author have a Wikipedia article?:
 * 14) * What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?:
 * 15) * What else has the author published?:
 * 16) * Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?:
 * 17) Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  ✅
 * 18) * Frederator Studios
 * 19) * The Onion
 * 20) * Cartoon Network
 * 21) * BuzzFeed
 * 22) * JesseMoynihan.com by Jesse Moynihan
 * 23) * Zap2it
 * 24) * Snagfilms
 * 25) Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

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Check for inline citations WP:MINREF: ✅


 * 1) Check for Direct quotations:  ✅
 * 2) * "never even ever existed." (no inline citation)
 * 3) * "mutagenic bomb" (no inline citation)
 * 4) * "really fit in the Adventure Time world".[6] (Check on source 6, successful, "With Finn and the viewer experiencing an alternate timeline, I thought it would be cool to design some characters that didn’t really fit in the Adventure Time world.")
 * 5) * "a little bit jarring" ... [6] (Check on source 6, successful, "The tone is I think, a little bit jarring, so I was worried that viewers would be put off by it")
 * 6) * "loosely inspired by the Japanese manga series Fist of the North Star.[6] ( no end quote after inspired ) (Check on source 6, successful, "heir look was loosely inspired by the Fist of the North Star. Pretty much, everything I do is loosely inspired by FOTNS.")
 * 7) * "Finn going insane" ... [6] (Check on source 6, successful, "And Finn going insane was I think all Rebecca. ")
 * 8) * "a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series."[4] (Check on source 4, successful, "The Dog” is more focused on humor and relationships, and the result is a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series.")
 * 9) * "an action-packed, mythology-heavy chapter" ... [4] (Check on source 4, successful, "“Finn The Human” is an action-packed, mythology-heavy chapter, ...")
 * 10) * "nice change of pace".[4] (Check on source 4, successful, "This two-parter is a nice change of pace, but it’s nice to be back in the rainbow-colored world of Ooo.")
 * 11) * "irreverent and narratively engaging".[8] (Check on source 8, successful, "... more clearly represents the progress of the medium: Irreverent and narratively engaging, ...")
 * 12) * "the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions."[8] (Check on source 8, successful, "... it's the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions.")
 * 13) * "sad subtext" ... [8] (Check on source 8, successful, "... toys with an incredibly sad subtext: The world has been destroyed in something called The Great Mushroom War.")
 * 14) * "deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites" ... [8] (Check on source 8, successful, "Through friendship and playtime, the characters seemingly deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites.")
 * 15) * "cheery songs and vibrant artwork" were some of the series strongest points.[8] (Check on source 8, successful, "The cheery songs and vibrant artwork remain sincere while challenging the backdrop at the same time.")
 * 16) * "interesting creative challenge".[8] (Check on source 8, successful, " provided an interesting creative challenge for Ward and his team: a prolonged running time of half an hour, which basically amounted to a double episode.")
 * 17) Check for Likely to be challenged:  ✅
 * 18) Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP):  NA


 * c. No original research: ✅

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 * 1) Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  ✅
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3: Broad in its coverage

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 * 6) Check for All material that is referenced is covered:
 * 7) Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered:
 * 8) Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge:
 * 9) Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

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 * 1) Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH):
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4: Neutral

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4. Fair representation without bias: ✅


 * 1) Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  ✅
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 * 6) Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  ✅
 * 7) Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  ✅
 * 8) Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  ✅
 * 9) Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  ✅
 * 10) Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  ✅
 * 11) Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  ✅
 * 12) Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI):  None
 * 13) Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV):  None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images ✅ (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license)

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6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: ✅


 * 1) Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  ✅
 * 2) * Image 1 (Ming-Na 4.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with ''The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works.
 * 3) * Image 2 (Kumail Nanjiani by Gage Skidmore.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with ''The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works.
 * 4) Check for copyright status:  ✅
 * 5) * Image 1 (Ming-Na 4.jpg): Free.
 * 6) * Image 2 (Kumail Nanjiani by Gage Skidmore.jpg): Free.
 * 7) Check for non-free content (WP:NFC):  None
 * 8) Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR):  NA

6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: ✅


 * 1) Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  ✅
 * 2) * Image 1 (Ming-Na 4.jpg): Relevant.
 * 3) * Image 2 (Kumail Nanjiani by Gage Skidmore.jpg): Relevant.
 * 4) Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE):  None
 * 5) Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  ✅
 * 6) * Caption: "The episode guest starred Kumail Nanjiani (left) and Ming-Na Wen (right) among others." succinct and informative

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are :
 * The lead does not provide an accessible overview. Major Points like the Plot and the Reception are not the concise summaries of their respective sections.
 * The lead does not give relative emphasis to the Reception as is given in the body.
 * Short paragraphs generally do not warrant their own subheading. Merge Background and Events sections into the Plot.
 * Paragraphs should be long enough to develop an idea. Fix other short paragraphs.
 * No inline citations for the direct quotations: "never even ever existed." and "mutagenic bomb".
 * No end quote "loosely inspired by the Japanese manga series. It should be after inspired as per source 6.

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I'm delighted to see your work here. I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  05:32, 10 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Thank you for performing a very thorough review of this article. How do these changes look?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   02:13, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Good. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  02:19, 12 January 2014 (UTC)

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  02:19, 12 January 2014 (UTC)