Talk:First Battle of Maryang-san/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk) 04:31, 5 May 2011 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status. AustralianRupert (talk) 04:31, 5 May 2011 (UTC)

Progression

 * Version of the article when originally reviewed:
 * Version of the article when review was closed:

Technical review

 * a (Disambiguations): b (Linkrot)  c (Alt text)
 * no dabs,
 * ext links work,
 * alt text is present.

Criteria

 * It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * I have fixed a few typos, but there are a couple of things I couldn't fix (per below)
 * Thanks, they look good. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Prelude, this seems to be missing something: "with this formation which would bear the brunt of the fighting";
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Prelude, tense issue ("would be held", and "provided") "would be held in reserve and also provided a battalion to each of the other brigades as reinforcements";
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Prelude "regiments" should be wikilinked on first mention, currently I think it is on the second;
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * "first phase by 1KOSB with the 1KSLI and 3RAR in support" (slight inconsistency in use of definate article "the");
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * "counter-attack" and "counterattack";
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * wikilink "counter-battery fire";
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * not sure about this (and other examples of similar): "C and B Company" (shouldn't it be "C and B Companies" - plural?);
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Battle section, wikilink "section" ("and a section of medium machine-guns");
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * "To be sure, the assault was being" (to be sure sounds a little informal);
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Fall of Maryang San section, this could be tighter: "were unable to be in position in time to commence the attack as planned";
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * "B Company—commanded by Captain Henry Nicholls—lead off shrouded in the heavy mist" ("led" off);
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * "while undoubtedly a large number had also been wounded" (not sure about this, perhaps it would be better to use more subtle language, e.g. "while the Australians believed that a large number of Chinese had also been wounded");
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * "northwest of the summit" (I think this should be "north-west of the summit");
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * not sure about this "and to run ammunition forward at great risk" (probably remove "at great risk");
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * not sure about the wording here: "The Australians had won an impressive victory" (perhaps just say "The Australians had been victorious...")
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Aftermath, this is confusing: "with 283 killed by body count alone and another 50 captured" (it implies that someone can be killed by body count, when what you mean is that it was a method used to determine how many were killed);
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Aftermath "Distinguished Service Order" might be overlinked (it is already linked in a previous section);
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Aftermath, "During the battle, the logistic system proved robust enough" (whose logistic system?);
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Aftermath, "Through out the operation" (I think this should be "Throughout the operation" - the Macquarie dictionary lists "throughout");
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * in the Aftermath, "during which Private Bill Speakman was awarded the Victoria Cross" (I suggest rewording this slightly. Speakman probably wasn't awarded the VC during the fighting, but for the fighting);
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)


 * It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * No issues.


 * It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * No issues.


 * It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
 * No issues.


 * It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * No issues.


 * It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
 * a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images):  c (non-free images have fair use rationales):  d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
 * "File:Korean porters Nov 1951 (AWM HOBJ2563).jpg" - is missing description information on the image description page,
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * "File:Australian casualties Operation Commando Oct 1951 (AWM HOBJ2443).jpg" - same as above (this is on Commons), so you will need to edit the Commons page, or I can do this for you (I have a Commons account), if you tell me what you want added;
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * if you are considering taking this to FA, I would suggest replacing the non-free map if possible, although it seems okay for GA and the searches I did, didn't locate any free maps to replace it with.
 * Ack, I won't take it to FA but will look around for one. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Overall:
 * a Pass/Fail:
 * A couple of minor prose issues to deal with per above, but otherwise looks fine to me. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 09:38, 5 May 2011 (UTC)
 * All done now, thanks again for reviewing. Anotherclown (talk) 22:34, 6 May 2011 (UTC)
 * No worries, looks good. AustralianRupert (talk) 03:20, 7 May 2011 (UTC)