Talk:First Battle of Springfield/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 09:52, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 09:52, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

 * No duplicated links
 * No edit wars
 * File:Hungarians in the American civil war (1913) (14762685895).jpg could probably do with another, more standard, us pd
 * Added
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

 * "on a scout towards Springfield" "scouting mission"?
 * Rephased
 * "north at around dark" > "north when darkness fell"?
 * Have rephrased this. "At around dark" seems the most natural to me, but some searches on google for that exact string suggests that this is primarily a regional or colloquial use.
 * Why does the lede exclusively use "Federal" instead of "Union", as the infobox does?
 * So I've introduced this in the article as Federal (Union) now. Union is the traditional term, but Federal is starting to come into vogue now.
 * Worth mentioning in the Lede the connection between the MSG and CSA
 * done
 * "Frémont’s Body-Guard" this spelling of bodyguard is only used in the infobox
 * Based on the sources "Body Guard" without the hyphen is the historically accurate spelling, so I've switched over to that in the article
 * Don't need ranks in the infobox
 * Removed, although they'll be invariably added back by somebody reading the article in the future, as pretty much always happens when I remove them from infoboxen
 * Infobox reads as if the Prairie Scouts were a part of the bodyguard which I don't think was the case?
 * Should be a bit clearer now
 * "Praire Scouts" sp
 * Oops
 * You might want to fix the Operations to Control Missouri navbox; this battle isn't currently bolded out because it's a redirect
 * Fixed

Prelude

 * Give Zagonyi his rank
 * Done
 * Link Missouri River
 * Done

Battle

 * "Late on October 24, Zagonyi and the bodyguard" try not to begin sections with dates
 * Added another sentence in here to lead off
 * "the Federal ran into a small party" something missing here
 * Fixed
 * "swung his troops to a detour to approach Springfield from the west"
 * removed
 * Lede says Zagonyi's report was "at the expense of the Prairie Scouts" but main text only says "at the expense of other Federal soldiers"
 * Have made this a bit more consistent now
 * "has two companies charging with Zagonyi charging through a gap"
 * Done

Aftermath

 * Could give Johnston his rank, but it's post-war so not necessary
 * I don't think it's necessary, given that this is long postwar
 * Would it be appropriate to add some of these casualty figures to the infobox?
 * I don't know how helpful it would be, given the divergency among the sources. Anything from Zagonyi's report is suspect, and I personally doubt that Johnston would have any particular way of knowing much about this battle