Talk:Fishing Creek (North Branch Susquehanna River tributary)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 17:49, 8 April 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 17:49, 8 April 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments
On first pass, this looks strong--well sourced, comprehensive, and ripe for promotion. Thanks again for your work on it. I've marked a few quibbles below, and also made a few minor copyedits as I went; please check that I haven't inadvertently introduced any errors, and feel free to revert anything you disagree with. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:27, 10 April 2013 (UTC)


 * "whereas near in the lower portion of the watershed, " -- the "near in" here confuses me--shouldn't it be just one word or the other?


 * "Fishing Creek drains parts of five counties. These counties are Columbia County, Pennsylvania; Montour County, Pennsylvania; Sullivan County, Pennsylvania; and Luzerne County, Pennsylvania." -- am I miscounting, or are there only four counties listed here? -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:27, 10 April 2013 (UTC)
 * --I'd somehow forgotten to mention one of the counties in the watershed.


 * "Prehistory" -- I'm not sure about this as a section title. 1769 is a little late to call "prehistory"; what would you say to "Native American exploration and settlement"? It's a bit clearer.
 * --title changed to early history


 * "The first lots at the mouth of Fishing Creek were surveyed in 1769" -- you might make a clearer transition here by noting that British settlers were moving into the area in the 1700s.


 * I'd suggest delinking some of the very common terms in the article, like soil, sand, gravel, bear, deer, cannon, school, beach, bridge, etc.; it's not necessary to link such basic definitions. But this isn't a GA criterion, though, so won't affect this review a bit either way.


 * Also not an issue for GA, but consider fixing the bare link.

I'll get to the bare link in 9 or 10 hours. Thanks for reviewing! King Jakob  C2 01:46, 10 April 2013 (UTC)