Talk:Five Nights at Freddy's 4/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: ForksForks (talk · contribs) 21:54, 29 December 2023 (UTC)

Who doesn't love FNAF? Bear with me here as this is my first review. I will try and list anything I see up front in this first comment and then hopefully do some bold edits myself for copyedits and things of that nature.

Comments

 * In terms of it being a video game series, I'd like there to be a little more continuity between the articles. It's good that Sister Location is linked, but I wonder if in the reviews of the game there were comparisons to FNAF 3 that were drawn. At the very least I'd like readers to be able to navigate both directions, but if you disagree or have a better idea I don't think it's a big issue.
 * From what I can remember, the reviews only really made comparisons to FNAF 3 in the quality of the mobile ports.
 * "Unlike previous installments, which took place in abandoned restaurants, the player is placed into the role of a young child alone in his bedroom, tasked with surviving a night that lasts from midnight to 6:00 a.m...." on a second reading this makes sense, but it kind of elides the change over previous games (the setting) with what is the same (midnight to 6am gimmick). Maybe a sentence or two about what is typical for the FNAF series is appropriate.
 * Done.
 * "With no other means of delaying the advancement of the animatronics, [flashlight needed etc]", this sentence reads backwards to me. Would read better as "The player must rely on their flashlight to ward off..." etc.
 * Rewrote this bit.
 * "The player will be jumpscared", isn't jumpscare a noun typically? Seems this form is in the FNAF 3 article anyway though.
 * Unless I'm missing something, saying that something (or someone, rather) got "jumpscared" is really the only correct way to word that.
 * "the player is able to play a minigame that puts the player in a game of red light, green light mini-game" Two variations of minigame within one sentence, "minigame that puts the player in a game of [...] minigame" (I may take a crack at working on this sentence myself, just flagging it here) I rewrote this one myself, feel free to do it yourself as well

Stuff I've checked off already

 * Image usage: Looks good, detailed fair use rationale
 * Stable: Yes
 * Neutral: I think the review section is especially fair and flags a number of outlets. The sentence in the lead about the reception of the game is also a good sentence. No problems here.
 * Coverage: My measuring stick here is the FNAF 3 GA, and this seems perfect in comparison. The compactness and info density make for good reading. I can imagine someone pulling this up off of Google and learning a bit about the game quickly.
 * I'll dig into sourcing momentarily, but don't really expect there to be any blockers for this article. Reviewed the sources, I'm happy with these.


 * Thank you for taking your time to review this article, and I'm honored for it to be your first GAN review! I believe all above comments have been addressed, besides the ones you took a crack at yourself. Negative  MP1  00:01, 30 December 2023 (UTC)