Talk:Flamer (novel)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:25, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * Please fill in the "n.a."s in the File:Flamer (2020 graphic novel) cover.jpg fair use justification.  Not applicable is not a reasonable justification for any field.


 * "The novel is set in" It is set.


 * "a Boy Scouts summer camp" do we know where?
 * I couldn't find an exact location in any reliable source.


 * Link closeted.


 * "the last week of Aiden Navarro," like literally he's going to die? The plot ends with "suicide ideation" so I'm not clear.
 * Haha, reading that sentence again, you are very much correct that it gives that impression. Rewrote it to be clearer Aiden goes back home.


 * " Boy Scouts summer" link here too.


 * "public high school" link.


 * ""Navarro is also excited, since he has always been a good scout." not sure I understand the link between that and going to a public high school.
 * I've rewrote the two sentences to make it clearer he was excited about going to camp, but nervous about high school.


 * One sentence of the whole plot is referenced, why?
 * I usually reference sentences which could be challenged, usually for being interpretations of the text, which I felt was the case here. If you feel it's unnecessary, I can remove it.


 * "sharing about more intimate " about not necessary.


 * " the toxic masculinity and homophobia present in the Boy Scouts and Catholic organizations" this sounds like someone's opinion rather than encyclopedic fact.
 * I've rewrote so it doesn't attribute the characteristics to the institutions, since only one source says that.


 * "had a Catholic upbringing" leaving it late in the article to link Catholic.
 * Moved the wikilink to the plot section.


 * "bullying suffered by Aiden at home" is this his Catholic upbringing, because the plot doesn't mention any bullying at home.
 * I've removed the mention of his home


 * "and Kampung Boy" that's called The Kampung Boy.


 * "such as queen" no need for italics.


 * "in Horn Book Magazine's" it was The Horn Book Magazine before.


 * Don't force the references into one column.
 * The reflist was probably defaulting to one column due to bad wikicode from my part. Should be fixed now.


 * Pick a date format and stick with it, consistently.
 * I've changed the date of the first source, which used day-month-year, to month-day-year. All the dates should be formatted correctly, as far as I can tell.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:17, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your review! I've made the suggested alterations and a few more to address come concerns with the writing and content of the article. Isabelle 🔔 18:52, 5 September 2021 (UTC)