Talk:Flora Kaai Hayes/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aussie Article Writer (talk · contribs) 11:15, 17 July 2021 (UTC)

Discussion
, I'm back! I believe your notes from attributes 1b and 2b are resolved now – if not, please let me know what you'd like changed. (It's possible that the lede is still too long, but if so, I think your fresh eyes are needed to determine what else to cut.) I'm about to do a proofread in hopes of cleaning up some of the choppy sentences mentioned in 1a. As for 3a, I'm having trouble picturing where to include those organizations in the article since there's so little information (when she was in a given position, for how long, etc). Do you think a list-like structure in a subsection could work, or if not, what were you imagining? Thanks again for working with me on this! ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 18:13, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
 * I note that the image in this source which has a photo of a still image of the film looks like it may be out of copyright... perhaps something to add to the article? - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 12:24, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
 * I have reviewed the article, hopefully you will be back to see this review! I would love to help work with you on getting this to GA status, I think we can IAR and extend this review till you get back. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 12:50, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
 * , thank you so much for beginning this review! I’ll be offwiki for the remainder of the month, and I can’t wait to work on this with you once I’m back. ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 21:56, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
 * No probs, if there isn't much info maybe make a a list like you suggest would do the trick. The lead is much better, I just coalesced the first two paragraphs together. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 01:37, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
 * , thanks! I've added an "other positions" section with a simple bulleted list, omitting positions which are mentioned earlier in the article. What are your thoughts? ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 03:05, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
 * I’d add all the positions, no need to omit them. It is a list, after all. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 22:02, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
 * I don't think that'll make sense if the list is framed as "other positions", i.e. positions not mentioned in the article prose. Making it a list of all positions Hayes held seems strange, but if you think that's better...? ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 22:45, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Sorry for the delay in responding. I agree with you, best make it a list of all organizations. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 22:38, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Not a problem – there's no rush (a fact of which I have to frequently remind myself). I've made the suggested change! ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 03:14, 31 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Legend! This passes GA. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 16:26, 3 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Fantastic! Thank you so much for the review, . ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 17:05, 3 August 2021 (UTC)