Talk:Fluor Corporation/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TLSuda (talk · contribs) 19:02, 8 July 2014 (UTC)


 * Greetings! I know you've waited a few months for a review, but I have good news! I'm stuck in a tin can for 5 hours tomorrow late night UTC, so I'm going to use that time wisely to review this article. I expect to have the review posted in the early morning hours UTC the following day. (Approximately less than 36 hours from this post.) I look forward to reading and reviewing this article.  Cheers,  TLSuda  (talk) 18:15, 8 July 2014 (UTC)


 * Thanks User:TLSuda! One thing I will point out about this article is that as a construction company (as oppose to tech, internet or something more modern) it is not a buzzy topic that gets as much media coverage as you would expect for a Fortune 500 company, so some of the sources are a little weak or non-traditional (for example, I found a government report that summarized their most significant government contracts). I think I have used good judgement in these cases, but I'll see what you think in 36 hours! CorporateM (Talk) 19:47, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Hey sorry about the extreme delay. Internet has been spotty where I've been staying, so I've only been posting responses as I can. Here's my review.  Take your time in responding if you need it.  Cheers,  TLSuda  (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Initial review
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Almost there, just a few small things to consider. See prose review below.  TLSuda  (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Almost there, just a few small things to consider. See prose review below.  TLSuda  (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Almost there, just a few small things to consider. See prose review below.  TLSuda  (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Lead

 * "global services" does not need quotes around it.
 * ✅ It's actually the name of the division, so I put it in title-caps, etc., which should do the trick CorporateM (Talk) 15:35, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Early history

 * "President" should be lowercase when referring to the position and not using it as a title. IE President Obama vs Obama is president.
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 15:39, 13 July 2014 (UTC)


 * "Business declined rapidly during the Great Depression and picked up again during World War II" change "and" to "yet", it flows better
 * ✅ I used "but" does that work? CorporateM (Talk) 15:39, 13 July 2014 (UTC)


 * Spell out United States or write it as U.S. in the next sentence.


 * I just want to verify that the president in 1952's name was Si Fluor and that it isn't typo.
 * ✅ The source says "John Simon "Si" Fluor Jr." which is what I have now placed in the text. CorporateM (Talk) 15:43, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Diversification and restructuring

 * Add a comma after "In 1972..."
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 15:43, 13 July 2014 (UTC)


 * Same for US as above.


 * "Fluor's international business rebounded." When? What business? I assume sometime after 1987, but it is unclear.
 * ✅ Changed to "revenues" to make it more clear. CorporateM (Talk) 15:58, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Recent history

 * Add a comma after "In the 1990s..."
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 15:47, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Organization

 * Fix US
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 15:48, 13 July 2014 (UTC)


 * Link CEO to Chief executive officer, as this isn't always the meaning of the acronym
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 15:49, 13 July 2014 (UTC)


 * "anticorruption" should be "anti-corruption"
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 15:49, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Notable objects

 * US again x 3
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 15:51, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Side question

 * Not relevant to the GA discussion, but: Any reason you didn't use more of the parameters of the infobox? Like founder= former_name= area_served= divisions= ?  TLSuda  (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
 * ✅ Good question. CorporateM (Talk) 15:54, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
 * And with all of your additional work, I'm very happy to promote this article! Good work ! I'm glad that your work is so high quality and that your COI does not prevent you from being neutral as possible. Cheers,  TLSuda  (talk) 23:44, 13 July 2014 (UTC)