Talk:Food Sovereignty In Bolivia

Karissa, I think you have a lot of great information on the topic here. You do a great job of writing in a neutral manner. Additionally, I thought you did a good job of being broad in coverage. One challenge that covering the topic broadly as you do is the structure/ organization. I see that you have an outline at the bottom and was wondering how that will map onto the paper. I wonder also if the allyu system should have its own sub-section with an account of how the Bolivian government sought to incorporate a communal/ reciprocal system into a newly commoditized capitalist system.

Suggestion

This is definitely a very important topic and I think you do a good job in your Lead discussing the significance of this movement. My only suggestion would be to include a sub-section about the origin of this movement. You state that food sovereignty was incorporated into the Bolivian Constitution in 2009, however you make no mention as to why this change was made or what actions on behalf of the people contributed towards it. I think making a clear connection between the century old struggle and the present day struggle for food sovereignty would help the reader gain a better understanding of the movements principles. Otherwise I think this article is great! The details you include about the food sovereignty movement's political focus and incorporation of indigenous systems are very interesting and contribute to the article's balance. Meganepatton (talk) 22:44, 4 April 2015 (UTC)

Hi Karissa, Good lead section. I would just suggest rearranging this sentence because it doesn't read very smoothly: Foreign-investing agribusiness is understood by advocates of the movement as having colonial roots reaching back in time to sugarcane plantations in Bolivia and are viewed as functioning now via the consolidation of land ownership and deforestation. --- Maybe, Advocates of the movement consider the colonial sugarcane plantations of Bolivia to be the origins( or roots/introduction) of foreign-investing agribusiness. Contemporary foreign-investing agribusiness functions via the consolidation of land ownership and deforestation. Otherwise, good lead! As for structure, it looks like you're still working on organizing your article. Your section "Food Sovereignty in Bolivia's Constitution" includes information from sections 2-5 listed below your article. Do you plan to break up your main section? Right now it's hard to tell which section each paragraph belongs to, but if you follow the organization listed below your article I think you'll have a well-balanced article. The references you cite seem credible. However, your last four paragraphs don't have citations, so make sure you add those before you move your article over into the main space. A few copy edit suggestions: Focal to this food sovereignty objective is the production and consumption of foods produced in Bolivia. -- Maybe, "Central to..." instead of "Focal to..." This predicament underlies another tenet of food sovereignty in Bolivia, which is that indigenous people and farmers have the ability to decide what they are able and unable to eat, rather than international markets. --- "which is that indigenous people, rather than international markets, have the ability to decide what they eat." Kingsleyta (talk) 13:35, 6 April 2015 (UTC)kingsleyta

Suggestions
This is a fascinating topic and I'm glad you're working on it. A few thoughts: How did this idea get to Bolivia? --Carwil (talk) 21:24, 7 April 2015 (UTC)
 * While there are social movements backing food sovereignty in Bolivia, notably the major peasant and landless movements, it might be challenging to define it as "a movement." It might be better to say that FS is a vision backed my multiple movements, and a policy embedded in the constitution and maybe other laws.
 * It would be great to have a one-paragraph section that defines what "food sovereignty" is, and who its global advocates (especially Via Campesina) are.
 * Check out some of the following:
 * http://www.environment.yale.edu/tri/fellow/1893/
 * http://www.yale.edu/agrarianstudies/foodsovereignty/pprs/59_Cockburn_2013.pdf
 * http://repub.eur.nl/pub/50600/
 * http://www.ipsnews.net/2011/07/bolivia-new-food-policy-to-boost-small-scale-farms/
 * For more on the global place of FS in a struggle over the direction of agriculture, you could read: Martinez–Torres, M.E. and P.M. Rosset 2010. La Via Campesina: the birth and evolution of a transnational social movement. Journal of Peasant Studies, 37(1), 149–17
 * Just a reminder to change the first sentence so that it's more about what FS is, and less about what FS is not, or competes against.--Carwil (talk) 17:07, 13 April 2015 (UTC)