Talk:Football Glory/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:26, 6 May 2021 (UTC)

Comments A very nice article, good work. I'll put it on hold while these points are discussed. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 20:18, 8 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "One (against an..." this feels awkward. I would say it's a one- or two-player game and then describe how each mode works.  Perhaps even just leave it as one/two player for the lead.
 * ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "on varying pitches" perhaps "various" unless you mean the pitch itself changes.
 * ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "with London-based " no need to link London.
 * ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Was the successor game not notable enough for an article?
 * Doubtful; I found just one review and overall coverage is scarce. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "They play with" Perhaps more like "Clubs available for selection by the players are from..." or similar?
 * ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "National teams star in..." feature rather than star.
 * ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "and English League" -> "English Football League"
 * ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "the MS-DOS port" link port.
 * ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "refereeing decision, they can chase down and argue with the referee" link referee for "refereeing" not wait until "referee".
 * ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "from London. He talked with Croteam all day" don't link London and I doubt it was "all day"...
 * The source says "all day", albeit a direct quote from Holmes. The implication is that they worked much longer per day than usual, causing Holmes's odd 50/10 sleep rhythm. ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "about five-a-side football"" featuring?
 * ✅. IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * If you use access dates, do it consistently.
 * Access dates are set for those sources that I could actually access. I never really 'accessed' the Croteam pages as they have been dead for decades; I only ever accessed the archives. Should I still add access dates for these? IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * No, it's fine I understand your approach. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 08:00, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I made some changes and left individual comments above. Regards, IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
 * All good, happy to promote this, nice work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 08:00, 9 May 2021 (UTC)