Talk:Forastero/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:45, 20 August 2020 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 08:45, 20 August 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

General

 * Please only have one short description at the top not two; the second should be deleted

Lead

 * "for Consejo Mundial de Lucha Libre (CMLL) based in Mexico City" - Mexico City-based Consejo Mundial de Lucha Libre (CMLL)
 * "where their private lives are kept a secret from the wrestling fans." - concealed from wrestling fans.

Personal life

 * "the personal lives of masked wrestlers are kept out of the spot light." - concealed from the public.
 * "Several of his cousins also became wrestlers, most notably El Cuatrero, Sansón, Universo 2000 Jr. and Máscara Año 2000 Jr." - Several of his cousins such as El Cuatrero, Sansón, Universo 2000 Jr. and Máscara Año 2000 Jr. went on to become wrestlers.

Consejo Mundial de Lucha Libre (2015–current)

 * "to defeat his cousins and Rafaga." - which cousins?
 * "At this point in time Forastero began training at the CMLL wrestling school in Guadalajara, and later Mexico City, furthering his training under Franco Colombo, Virus and Último Guerrero. Initially, Forastero would often face off against his cousins, with the family relationship being downplayed early on in CMLL. Forastero was teamed up with El Hijo del Calavera and Magnum for a tournament to determine the next Occidente Trios Champions" - this whole passage of text is uncited and will need reliable source(s) to verify that it is correct
 * "During the summer of 2015" - don't use seasons as a reference time-frame per MOS:SEASON
 * "Forastero put his mask on the line in a 12-man steel cage match where the last man in the cage would be forced to unmask." - repetition of the word "man"
 * "In the fall of 2015" - same issue as the third point in this section
 * "Forastero made his Mexico City debut in October 2016, making his main venue debut teaming" - repetition of the word "debut"
 * "In early 2017 Forastero participated in his first major tournament as he was one of 16 second-generation wrestlers participating in that year's La Copa Junior tournament." - repetition of the words participating and tournament
 * "For the Gran Alternativa CMLL pairs up a rookie with a veteran wrestlers" - wrestler
 * "("The Sons of the Inferno";" - the colon should be replaced by the closing parentheses
 * "capping off the tour" - ending
 * "2019 also marked the first year that Forastero participated" - The year also saw Forastero participate
 * "The odd couple were eliminated by Carístico and Mephisto in the first round ." - the extra space between "round" and the period is unneeded
 * "in what was their tenth overall championship defense." - change the text in bold to title for variety
 * Wikilink El Soberano Jr., Bárbaro Cavernario and Volador Jr.

Independent circuit (2014–current)

 * "While working for CMLL, Zacarias, like all CMLL workers, is allowed to take independent circuit bookings on days he is not needed by CMLL." - repetition of working/workers and CMLL
 * Wikilink International Wrestling Revolution Group
 * "who was teaming with Capo del Sur and Capo del Norte, who both use ring characters inspired by the original Los Dinamitas" - end this sentence with a full stop

Spanish typos
Hi. Here are some typos. dinastia - dinastía Mistico - Místico tecnico - técnico

One special. In Spanish, Dragon is Dragón. However, I have never read in Spanish Dragón Lee, but Dragon Lee instead.

Also, source 17 doesn't work.

Also, I would prefer Outsider as translation for Forastero. In western, a Forastero is the new man in town, an outsider. --HHH Pedrigree (talk) 12:28, 21 August 2020 (UTC)
 * All done, thank you. MPJ-DK (talk) 13:32, 21 August 2020 (UTC)