Talk:Fox Terrier/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Anna  talk 16:16, 12 July 2011 (UTC)

Hi, I'll be starting this review shortly. Anna talk 16:16, 12 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Fixed three disambiguation links.
 * Updated urls for two dead links.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:


 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

I'll place my comments down here - had tried to insert them directly after yours but for whatever reason they weren't showing. They're in exactly the same order as your comments.
 * Reworded it and dropped the world/countries bit entirely. Once I read your comment I couldn't help but think that the countries were about to be listed when I read the original prose.
 * Reworded to "They have been successful in conformation shows, although more prominently in America than in their homeland."
 * Dropped that sentence and merged the second paragraph into the first as it was otherwise a bit short.
 * That would have been quite clever of them! :) Changed to "demonstrating".
 * That's my brain thinking faster than I can type. Changed to "The earliest record of any white terrier was a dog named Pitch, who was owned by Colonel Thomas Thornton in 1790."
 * Reworded it quite a bit.
 * Done.

Completed up until ""There are two originating breeds of Fox Terrier, Smooth and Wire, both of which originate in England." -- Repetitive (originate, originating)." Will fix everything else once I'm back home tonight (the joys of a lunch break!). Miyagawa  (talk)  13:40, 15 July 2011 (UTC)

Ok, here we go again.
 * Replaced originate with main.
 * Removed second part of sentence as suggested.
 * Changed as suggested.
 * Changed as suggested.
 * Best in Show is now capitalised throughout.
 * Changed as suggested.
 * Changed as suggested.
 * Done.

Addressing the Sarah's Dogs replacements at the moment. Will add a note once they're replaced. Miyagawa  (talk)  18:18, 15 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Ok, cleared out the last of the Sarah's Dogs references. I think everything is covered now. :) Miyagawa   (talk)  18:39, 15 July 2011 (UTC)
 * All looks good now. I've just gone through and changed everything to British English where possible as some areas were using American spellings. I'm not familiar with every intricacy there, so I hope I didn't miss anything -- could you verify? Everything looks great otherwise; thanks for your prompt replies. :) Anna  talk 17:12, 17 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Put it through the Microsoft Word UK spellcheck and nothing else came up - forgot the browser one was in US English. Also added the British English template to the talk page. Miyagawa   (talk)  11:51, 18 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Sounds good. I've now passed it -- congrats and nice job. Anna  talk 15:04, 18 July 2011 (UTC)