Talk:Frame & Canvas/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 14:29, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

I will be sure to keep watch on this next time, so I am aware when you have responded --K. Peake 14:29, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Remove flatlist since it should only be bullet points in the infobox
 * Remove wikilink on studio album
 * Do not need "independent label" introduction for the lead
 * "After the release of" → "After the release of the band's second studio album,"
 * "as he was unable" → "due to him being unable"
 * "Recording took place" → "Recording sessions took place"
 * "December 1997 with J. Robbins helping to produce" → "December 1997, with J. Robbins helping with production during"
 * "Frame & Canvas is an" → "The album is an"
 * "album with lyrics co-written" → "release, for which the lyrics were co-written"
 * "or solely from Nanna." → "or solely wrote by Nanna."
 * "promoted with tours across the US," → "promoted by Braid with tours across the United States,"
 * "Discount and Burning Airlines." → "Discount, and Burning Airlines."
 * "Frame & Canvas received..." remove this sentence since there are not enough reviews to back it up
 * "It would go on to sell over" → "It had sold over"
 * "Frame & Canvas has appeared on best-of album lists" → "The album has appeared on best-of lists"
 * "in publications such as" → "by multiple publications, such as"
 * "NME and Rolling Stone." → "NME, and Rolling Stone."
 * Add a final sentence saying something like "The band performed it in full during a tour across the US in 2012." since this belongs away from the other tours due to being a lot later

Background and production

 * "Following the release of" → "Following the release of their second studio album"
 * Remove wikilink on Braid since they are the lead artists
 * "played shows around" → "played shows in"
 * "Wisconsin and Missouri" → "Wisconsin, and Missouri"
 * "in February," → "in February 1997,"
 * "left from the band in March." → "left Braid the following month."
 * "Atkinson was a fan" → "Atkinson had been a fan"
 * "Touring continued throughout the year;" → "Braid's touring continued throughout 1997;"
 * "Tomorrow and Compound Red," → "Tomorrow, and Compound Red,"
 * "dropped out as the band was" → "dropped out as they were"
 * ""First Day Back" and "Hugs from Boys"" → "The tracks "First Day Back" and "Hugs from Boys""
 * "the band traveled across the United States with" → "Braid traveled across the US with"
 * "in October." → "in October of that year."
 * "on a 7" vinyl record through" → "on a 7" vinyl, through" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "and co-founder Darcie Knight" → "and fellow co-founder Darcie Knight"
 * "the band traveled to" → "Braid traveled to"
 * "in Arlington, Virginia," → "in Arlington County, Virginia," with the wikilink
 * "The band had met" → "Braid had met"
 * "work on Frame & Canvas." → "working on the album with him."
 * "served as the engineer" → "served as the engineer for Frame & Canvas"
 * Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)

Composition and lyrics

 * "acts such as" → "acts, such as"
 * "Jawbox (of which Robbins was a member)." → "Jawbox, the latter of which Robbins was a member of."
 * "the rest with Broach." → "the other five with Broach."
 * "up with the title" → "up with the title of"
 * "said it referred to" → "said the title referred to"
 * "compared to previous releases; he explained it" → "than the band's previous releases; he explained this"
 * "It features Broach" → "The song features Broach"
 * "included references to being an" → "includes references to Braid being an"
 * Wikilink airplay
 * "and settling in after" → "and is about settling in after"
 * "talks about a breakdown" → "talks about breakdowns"
 * ""this cool beat ... immediately once he started playing. 'This is different'."" → ""this cool beat". Nanna stated that "immediately once he started playing", he thought: "This is different.""
 * Wikilink Urbana, Illinois
 * Target Champaign to Champaign, Illinois
 * "street lights in the town" → "street lights in Urbana"
 * "was written with" → "was written along with"
 * "they were making in the basement was happening upstairs." → "Braid were making in the basement was being made upstairs."
 * "According to him," → "According to Broach,"
 * "himself on tour he would compose" → "himself on tour, he would write"

Release and tours

 * Retitle to Release and promotion
 * "and March 1998," → "and March of 1998,"
 * "on April 7 through" → "on April 7 of that year, through"
 * "with a stint across the United State" → "by performing across the US"
 * "until early May." → "until early May 1998."
 * "The band immediately went" → "Braid immediately went"
 * "throughout May, and various acts in June." → "throughout that month, while they were accompanied various acts in June 1998."
 * "In August, they played" → "In August of that year, the band played"
 * "October and early November." → "October and early November of 1998."
 * "of November and December, the band" → "of November and the following month, Braid"
 * "After a handful of" → "After a number of"
 * "went on a west coast tour" → "embarked on a west coast tour"
 * "throughout April with" → "throughout the following month with"
 * "with Eversor in May." → "with Eversor in May 1999."
 * "In June, the band announced" → "In June of that year, Braid announced"
 * "playing a friend's wedding," → "performing at a friend's wedding,"
 * "shows in August," → "shows in August 1999,"
 * "a hometown performance[2]" → "a hometown performance,[2]"
 * "as the Lucky to Be Alive (2000) live album." → "as their live album Lucky to Be Alive (2000)."
 * "from the band's last five days" → "from Braid's last five days as a band"
 * "included in the band's" → "included in their"

Reception and legacy

 * "pop melodies"," → "pop melodies" on Frame & Canvas," with the target
 * "which were" → "which he wrote were"
 * "The record cemented itself as one of the band's" → "In the opinion of Blake, the album cemented itself as one of Braid's"
 * "as to say by the end" → "as to say that by the end"
 * "said it was" → "said the album was"
 * "in Atkinson, a" → "in Atkinson, alongside a"
 * "over 16,000 copies." → "over 16,000 copies worldwide."
 * "emo album lists by" → "emo album lists, being named to lists by"
 * Target Vulture to Vulture.com per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "said the album establish" → "said the album established"
 * "The album was an" → "Frame & Canvas was an"
 * "scene that was based" → "scene, the latter of which was based"
 * "favorite Braid album: "You" → "favorite Braid album, saying: "You"
 * "US tour where they performed" → "US tour, during which they performed"

Track listing

 * All music by Braid, lyricist noted below in brackets.[11] All songs produced by J. Robbins and Braid.[10] → All music by Braid.[11] All songs produced by J. Robbins and Braid.[10]
 * I have suggested the above change, since you should use the track listing template to lay the tracks out since the writers are known for all of them and see MOS:TABLECAPTION

Personnel

 * Use div col to place Additional musicians and Production on the right from Braid

Final comments and verdict
Done. Yeepsi (talk) 16:31, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Once again a quick response, ✅ now! --K. Peake 06:01, 15 October 2020 (UTC)