Talk:Francis Dzierozynski/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:32, 19 February 2020 (UTC)

Comments Not much else to say at this stage. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 12:29, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * " in White Marsh, Maryland endured" WP:GEOCOMMA after Maryland.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  17:31, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * " at novitiate in Połock. He studied at the novitiate" at novitiate vs at the novitiate, and either way, a little repetitive.
 * Streamlined.  Ergo Sum  17:32, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Is a "collegium " different to a college? There's no link or explanation.
 * That's just what some Jesuit colleges in Europe were named. I plan on making an article about that specific one.  Ergo Sum  17:33, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "students[4] in the Jesuit College.[5]" move that [4] to in front of [5].
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  17:35, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * " three of which spent spent at sea" replace the first "spent" with "was".
 * Fixed.  Ergo Sum  17:35, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "The president of Georgetown College" vs "with Vice President John C. Calhoun" capitalisation inconsistency?
 * Well, one is a title, whereas the other is just referring to the office. For example, if it said President Fenwick, then it would be capitalized. Basing this on Manual of Style  Ergo Sum  17:36, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * " as superior of the Jesuit Mission in Maryland. As superior, ..." repetitive.
 * Streamlined.  Ergo Sum  17:38, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "Dzierozynski continued teaching at Georgetown...." seems like a strange phrase here.
 * Rephrased.  Ergo Sum  17:39, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * " In 1827, he... Missouri in 1827" - perhaps "the same year" instead of repeating?
 * Rephrased.  Ergo Sum  17:39, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * " the whole church", forgive my ignorance but as this is a specific "Church" (i.e. group) shouldn't this be Church, not church?
 * Yes. Certainly, one can raise some thorny theological questions there, but I think most would accept your reading of it.  Ergo Sum  17:41, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * " conducted by a legally separate entity (the Corporation of Roman Catholic Clergymen)" perhaps " conducted by the Corporation of Roman Catholic Clergymen, acting as a legally separate entity"
 * Rephrased.  Ergo Sum  17:42, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * " Propaganda Fide" probably needs to be italicised.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  17:43, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Refs 3, 10, 30 need "pp" instead of "p"
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  17:44, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you, as always.  Ergo Sum  17:44, 24 February 2020 (UTC)
 * No worries. Happy with the changes, so I will promote.  Good work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 17:51, 24 February 2020 (UTC)