Talk:Francis X. Talbot/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:28, 14 February 2020 (UTC)

Comments That's all I have. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:23, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "entering the publishing world" feels a little whimsical, why not just "entering publishing" or is to break up the ..ing ...ing?
 * Yes, it was mostly aesthetic. I've rephrased to your recommendation, though.  Ergo Sum  21:14, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "of which he became its " just "the" instead of "its" as you have "of which" already.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:14, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "previewed movies for the National Legion of Decency, and supported Franco's rule in Spain" these seem to be completely unrelated (to my ignorant self) and the sentence does go on a little, so perhaps split after Decency?
 * Broke it up.  Ergo Sum  21:15, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "Philadelphia, Pennsylvania to" comma after Pennsylvania.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:16, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I don't think "fiction" needs linking. If there was a more specific link, like Catholic fiction then perhaps that would be useful.
 * Removed.  Ergo Sum  21:16, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "In 1982, he founded" he was dead...
 * Accidentally transposed the digits.  Ergo Sum  21:19, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Literary career section has eight "also"s perhaps needs a bit of variety in there?
 * Changed it up a bit.  Ergo Sum  21:20, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I would expect to see ex officio in italics.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:21, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "until 1947. At the same time, during World War II' just reads a little odd, three consecutive timeframes...
 * Rearranged the sentences.  Ergo Sum  21:22, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "on July 26, 1947 by " comma after 1947.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  21:22, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "in Annapolis, Maryland from " comma after Maryland.
 * Added.  Ergo Sum  21:23, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "of Jesus,. New York:" spare comma here, could be recycled for the comment above...!
 * Removed.  Ergo Sum  21:23, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Is there a space between quote marks in the last Writings bullet?
 * Yes, it appears the template inserts a space between two quotation marks.  Ergo Sum  21:24, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks, as always, for your review. Much appreciated.  Ergo Sum  21:25, 17 February 2020 (UTC)