Talk:Frank McKetta

Review
Hey this is Brandon from class. I thought the article was very informative and interesting. Content wise the article was great. The information was presented well and really helped me to understand about Mcketta and his career. There were some issues with the grammar and some of the sentences were a bit awkwardly worded. Overall all though the whole article was good and just needs some minor tweaks to make it better.

Here are somethings that I think that you can take a look at and see if you want to edit them. I don't want to go in there and mess with the article. In the section on immigration in the second paragraph the last sentence stated-The boys took care of the farm land, and neither the boys nor the girls attended any type of schooling because Ukraine did not have any form of elementary schools in this part during the early 1900s. I think that this sentence would be better if it were broken up into two sentences. Also the sentence that was talking about the John being only 14 should have another comma in it so it would be this the oldest son, john, was only 14. I think that is how it should be. These are a few examples of some of the grammar and sentence things that need to be fixed up. There were overall not that many of those mistakes though.

I enjoyed reading the article and thought that it was able to accomplish what it was trying to do. I now know about Frank McKetta and had a relatively easy time of understanding the article. If you have any questions for me just let me know and i would be happy to help.Weepy89 (talk) 22:53, 18 April 2010 (UTC)

Review
Hi this is Nicole, also from class. Great work on your article. The pictures and especially the graph really enhance the article. I fixed some minor grammatical errors in the first half. However, the sentences are a little choppy. Consider cutting them in half and making them simplier. Try not to make it a "this" and "then" discussion. Instead make the sentences more fluid. Hope this helps and great job! Nicocorn20 (talk) 14:04, 22 April 2010 (UTC)