Talk:Frank Soo/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 09:03, 15 December 2019 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this one, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 09:03, 15 December 2019 (UTC)

Initial review

Infobox

 * Not a major issue, but is there a reason you have two refs for his full name even though there doesn't appear to be any contradictions?
 * Removed one.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * Source for his height?
 * I cannot find one.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * Prescot Cables are listed as a youth team but in the text it states he began his senior career with the side?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)

Lead

 * Linking Chinese but not English seems rather unnecessary. Nationalities are generally considered an WP:OVERLINK.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * "and then was moved on to Luton Town", a little overlong perhaps. Given the later part of the sentence gives a timeframe, I don't think we need both then and was together. Reads a little clunkily I would say.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * Any reason Djurgården aren't linked?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)

Early and personal life

 * Our own article on laundry would suggest that the British English wording would support laundrette rather than laundry?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)

Stoke City

 * The final part of this section appears unreferenced. Paragraphs shouldn't really end without a source.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * No need to link Poland.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)

World War II

 * Same as above with the first paragraph here.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * Add the abbreviation (RAF) after Royal Air Force to explain future uses of the shortened term.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * "pathological dislike of star players", do we know who made this quote? It seems a little like its being stated as fact rather than an opinion.
 * I've changed the sentence.--EchetusXe 13:12, 16 December 2019 (UTC)

Luton Town

 * The second half of the paragraph appears unsourced.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)

Chelmsford City

 * "Soo signed with Chelmsford City directly from Luton", is directly needed here?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * "Kidderminster Harriers made of a bid of £1,000", doesn't quite work.
 * Changed.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * "City finished in fourth-place position", position isn't really necessary here, fourth-place is perfectly explanatory I would say.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)


 * Again, could do with a ref for the end of the section.
 * Done. Weird habit I developed.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)

Managerial statistics

 * As obvious as it is, the table could do with a total.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)