Talk:Franklin Center (Chicago)/GA1

GA Reassessment
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I will be doing the GA Reassessment on this article as part of the GA Sweeps project. H1nkles (talk) 15:01, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

The article is good, the writing is tight and the subject is comprehensive. The article is up to date and the references are well-formatted. I'm concerned that the image in the lead has no licensing on it. Being that I am not very versed in image requirements I'm not confident enough to say that's a problem so I will raise the issue in the hopes that if it is an issue that someone will address it. There is one dead link in the references section: [7]. This should be repaired. Otherwise the article is fine. I'll keep it at GA. H1nkles (talk) 15:18, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

GA status questionable
The writing is not "tight" as the previous editor stated. In fact, the introduction, beyond which I have not looked, is a total mess because it puts all the information round the wrong way.
 * The AT&T Corporate Center is the 5th tallest completed skyscraper in Chicago in Cook County, Illinois, United States and the 9th tallest in the United States at a height of 1,021 ft (307 m) containing 60 floors.[2] Completed in 1989, the 1.7 million square foot (158,000 m²) supertall building stands two blocks east of the Chicago River and northeast of the Willis Tower at 227 West Monroe Street (100 South Franklin alternate address)[3] in the Loop community area of downtown Chicago.[4] Composed of retail and commercial office space, the tower is the tallest building constructed in Chicago in the last quarter of the 20th century.[5][6] The building was built to consolidate American Telephone & Telegraph Company central regional headquarters offices.[7]

What are the problems?
 * First sentence: "The AT&T Corporate Center is the 5th tallest completed skyscraper in Chicago in Cook County, Illinois, United States and the 9th tallest in the United States at a height of 1,021 ft (307 m) containing 60 floors.[2]"
 * Too long
 * Doesn't say exactly what it is
 * Begins with a piece of trivia which is a variable factor, not a permanent one.
 * Separates info about the height and the floors from the other specifications which are given in the second sentence.


 * Second sentence:"Completed in 1989, the 1.7 million square foot (158,000 m²) supertall building stands two blocks east of the Chicago River and northeast of the Willis Tower at 227 West Monroe Street (100 South Franklin alternate address)[3] in the Loop community area of downtown Chicago."
 * Give either its location or its specifications in this sentence, not both.


 * Third sentence:"Composed of retail and commercial office space, the tower is the tallest building constructed in Chicago in the last quarter of the 20th century.[5]"
 * Another sentence of a mixed subject. Put the stuff about the height in the same sentence as the other stuff about the height. None of it goes in the first sentence.


 * Fourth sentence:"The building was built to consolidate American Telephone & Telegraph Company central regional headquarters offices."
 * As an Australian reader, I don't have a clue what AT&T stands for. The information in this sentence needs to be part of the firdt or second sentence.


 * Missing information
 * Who was the architect?
 * There are two pieces of date related information. They need to be together.

How to write an intro about a building. Put the absolute essentials in the first paragraph, and then link like information, rather than mixing up sentences and paragraphs.
 * 1) First sentence should state simply what type of building it is (house, skyscraper, cathedral), its city and country and its purpose (The purpose, if of great significance, might flow into another sentence.) The first paragraph should include the architectural style, the architect and who the building was built for. (In ancient buildings the architect these two last facts might be uncertain.) The first paragraph can also give an exact location (if it doesn't fit into the first sentence).


 * 1) A subsequent paragraph can contain other facts of significance. The specifications are not necessary in the intro unless they are highly significant. The history, or the style may be more important eg, history at the White House and style at Fallingwater. Keep info of the same type together and in separate sentences for separate topics. Other important facts include heritage status.

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