Talk:Franklin Park, Columbus Ohio

Final class editor comments: Ryanlaber (talk) 00:51, 15 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Good work.
 * This section in history is confusing. Was the land being attained (obtained) by the City of Columbus? You jump from this statement to the part about the park. I would just consider rephrasing for clarity: "From the 1850's to the 1880's the land that is now considered Franklin Park was being attained.[1]. In 1852, Franklin Park was home to the Columbus Fairgrounds. The Fairgrounds held county and state fairs and stood here for 30 years until the influx of urbanization.[2] It was not until 1884 that the County decided to move the Fairgrounds to a more remote area and the next year established that there would be a city park in place of the Fairgrounds."
 * Don't forget: "The historical boundaires are..."
 * Don't forget: Demographics section.

Consider replacing citations of website homepages with more specific webpages that contain the exact information that is presented in this article. (Ryanlaber (talk) 16:53, 17 November 2014 (UTC))

=Instructor Comments=

Well-written

 * Work on editing text for style and conciseness.
 * Take a look at the Wikipedia manual of style.

Verifiable with no original research

 * Good work on Citations. Needs a few more here and there though - like on zoning. This is a simple fix: just cite the GIS maps available online.
 * Your sources are reliable.

Broad in its coverage

 * Like the inclusion of Franklin Park's history and churches.

Neutral

 * Be careful here: For instance:

Built in 1937, this eight story apartment building towers over the rest of the neighborhood. The building's style is Modernist, derived from 1920's Art Deco, that is both understated and elegant. It adds breath to the surrounding area in terms of both verticality and architectural style.

This should read:

Built in 1937, this eight story apartment building is the tallest building in the neighborhood. It is notable for it Modernism architecture, derived from 1920's Art Deco.

Stable

 * No comments yet.

Illustrated

 * Very well done.

Kenitzer.1 (talk) 14:46, 4 December 2014 (UTC)

=Peer Review Comments=

Assigned Peer Reviewer
- Andy Krupin and Allie McKnight — Preceding unsigned comment added by Krupin.1 (talk • contribs) 01:56, 5 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Consider incorporating a lead section that gives a brief overview of the neighborhood. This is the first thing people will see when they Google your neighborhood. More information on the lead section can be found on the course page.
 * Watch out for neutrality in writing - Ie) "A series of steeped waterfalls, one of the more spectacular features of Franklin Park." Consider omitting the word "spectacular" here.
 * There's a broken link in the info box. Besides that the info box looks great!
 * History section seems a bit jumbled up, especially with the founding of the town being under "Streetcar Suburb" instead of at the beginning. If you can find more information, expand more in this section. How has the neighborhood changed over time?
 * Citation needed in the geography section. This has already been noted
 * Great find on the Asian influence section - this is really well done
 * Consider adding even more links to other Wikipedia articles - ie) styles in the "Royal York Apartments" subsection. This also needs a citation.
 * Consider adding a picture of a home in the residential section
 * Provide just a little bit more information on the commercial section so it looks less like a straight up list. Ie) What kind of counselors are there in Franklin Park?
 * Again, neutrality issues in "Franklin Park has excellent recreational facilities for the community" and "The Alum Creek Multi-use Trail or The Ohio to Erie Trail is an important trail that runs through Franklin Park. This trail travels along one of the city's most scenic river corridors."
 * Consider adding a photo of a religious institution.
 * If you have a citation for Royal York Apartments it would be great to add that.  — Preceding unsigned comment added by Amcknight.95 (talk • contribs) 13:44, 5 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Overall nice job! Main clean up needs to be adding citations and making sure things are neutral.

Class Editor
Ryanlaber (talk) 04:05, 9 December 2014 (UTC)
 * Tremendous job.
 * Yes, focus on neutrality, but it seems fine to recognize "important", "significant", "substantial" features. Just don't comment on "beauty", "excellence", etc.
 * Unless you're going to add to it, is the "streetcar suburb" subsection necessary? It is only one sentence.
 * Include a lead section. Parts of you History section feel like they could go in the lead section.
 * Although not specifically noted because they are kind of in the grey area, make sure that every peice of information in the article that is not common knowledge is cited, i.e. that Franklin park is 88 acres, that Royal York Apartments were built in 1937, etc.