Talk:Freak on a Leash/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  C  anniba loki  16:52, 11 August 2010 (UTC)

Checklist
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * The lead section does not summarize the article correctly, while the track listing section is too long and repetitive.
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * " 'Freak on a Leash' was recorded in March 1998 at NRG Recording Studios in North Hollywood, California." Here, the source lead me to a product description page at Tower Records.
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * According to WikiProject Songs, we should "write about the music and lyrics, its influences and its effect on culture." The article says that "Freak on a Leash" won several awards, but just that. It says nothing about influence or something like legacy.
 * B. Focused:
 * "Freak on a Leash" is four minutes and fifteen seconds long. [...] The song contains vocals, guitars, bass and percussion. It expresses moods such as anger, drama, and sarcasm.
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * According Reginald Arvizu in his book Got the Life, " 'Freak on a Leash' is considered to be one of Korn's biggest singles." The song "was also immensely popular in Australia where the single was certified Gold for shipments in excess of 35,000 units."
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * File:FreakOnALeashCover.PNG is 400 pixels, but should be a maximum 300 pixels.
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * File:Freakonaleashstill.jpg does not meet the non-free content criteria §8.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Failed. It should be noted that good article candidacy is not a substitution for peer review.--  C  anniba loki  22:35, 11 August 2010 (UTC)
 * File:Freakonaleashstill.jpg does not meet the non-free content criteria §8.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Failed. It should be noted that good article candidacy is not a substitution for peer review.--  C  anniba loki  22:35, 11 August 2010 (UTC)

Comments

 * "Prior to the album's release, Korn had an instrumental section of the song, described as a 'noisy guitar break'. The section was taken out of the song after their fans requested it be taken out." Aside from the fact you have used Billboard instead of Spin in the reference's "publisher" field (see Google Books), the source does not says that "the section was taken out of the song after their fans requested it be taken out." In the words of Neil Strauss, "Everybody who wants to take the Biohazard part out of 'Freak on a Leash,' raise your hand," yells Fieldy. Four out of five Korns raise their hands. Davis, the lone holdout, tries to protest, but he's drowned out by Head, who is busy chanting: "I want a bigger house, I want a bigger house."


 * "... and since then, it has been re-released several times." Remove the vague wording please.


 * "Before Follow the Leader was released, they promoted the studio album by going on the Family Values Tour." Going on?


 * " 'Freak on a Leash' is four minutes and fifteen seconds long." Is this sentence really relevant?


 * "The song uses dissonance, distortion, and various effects to bring the song 'to life.' " "...to bring the song 'to life.' "?


 * "David Lloyd from the University of Alberta said that the song was an example of a 'nonsense-utterance' technique used by lead vocalist Jonathan Davis." What is this "nonsense-utterance" technique?


 * "Lloyd also noted that the song contained 'fragments of English–language words' ..." Really?


 * "Elias Pampalk said that the song was "rather aggressive" and said it was heavy metal/death metal. Pampalk proclaimed that "melodic elements do not play an important role in 'Freak on a Leash' and the specific loudness sensation is a rather complex pattern". There are reoccurring elements throughout 'Freak on a Leash'." According to Elias Pampalk, "The thesis deals with the challenges involved in the automatic creation of such interfaces given only raw music data (e.g. MP3s) without any further information such as to which genres the pieces of music belong." Why did you use it as a source for music genres?

--  C  anniba loki  16:52, 11 August 2010 (UTC)
 * ✅--  C  anniba loki  20:31, 11 August 2010 (UTC)