Talk:Fred Vehmeier/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 16:44, 29 August 2023 (UTC)

I'll review this. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 16:44, 29 August 2023 (UTC)

Comments
Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 22:44, 30 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Question about the image: are you sure this is the right guy? The source of the image is FindAGrave, which isn't necessarily reliable.
 * I did a light copyedit here.
 * The last section, on Family and Later years, just combine all the sentences into one paragraph.
 * I understand the desire to add a table for his coaching, but with one season and nothing of note, I don't really feel like it contributes to the article much.
 * Source spot checks: 1 and 2 I don't have access to. Checked #5, #9, #13, #16, #21, #23 and #28
 * Ref #28, does that need "url-access=subscription" or can you clip the specific article? The article isn't accessible to me.
 * Just letting you know it'll probably take a few days for me to get to any of these good article nominations - hope that's alright. BeanieFan11 (talk) 14:36, 31 August 2023 (UTC)
 * No worries. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 16:14, 31 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Still working on it; by the way, I found a quote from the 1914 UND yearbook that might be able to add some more to the article: a special coach was hired, Vehmeier of the University of Illinois. He with the assistance of "Gullie" gradually whipped the team into shape, and by the time of the A. C. game could well be proud of his efforts. That game was an epoch-making game in the annals of U. N. D. We won, 3 to 0; but the mere winning is not the big thing, not the thing to be remembered. The college spirit that had long seemed slumbering, suddenly awoke and proved its existence and mighty powers. The team back ed by such support was almost omnipotent. Each on-looker was lifted out of himself and forgetful of all save his institution and the glory of his team. The air was electric with tense loyalty and all conquering patriotism. Whenever our goal was endangered, the crowds unconsciously arose and with head s uncovered sang Alma Mater as it was never sung before, or followed "Andy" Seymour in cheering, that no one will ever forget. And the band rushing down to the goal line would play Alma Mater, again and again, till the yellow and green were beaten back and our goal again in safety. That day, November 6, 1912, was the most memorable day in our foot ball history; and in the remembrance of it, the thrills and college enthusiasm aroused there, are felt anew. Long may its memory live to be an encouragement and inspiration in future gridiron battles! Do you think any parts of that should be added? BeanieFan11 (talk) 19:45, 5 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Maybe a quick Quote box? It sounds like fairly typical yearbook embellishment, but is a fun read. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 20:38, 5 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Like this? BeanieFan11 (talk) 20:53, 5 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Yep! I tightened it up a bit and reformatted it. Let me know what you think. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 15:10, 6 September 2023 (UTC)

Follow-up comments
I think there are two outstanding questions : Let me know what you think. Neither item is a fatal flaw for passing the article, but would be good to have some responses to those items before moving forward. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 17:16, 7 September 2023 (UTC)
 * The source of the image, is it reliable?
 * The necessity of the table?
 * As for the image part, the person who uploaded it states "I collect antique photos, and will put people's photos on their memorial page, if I find their names written on the back, and am satisfied it's really that person." – that would indicate to me that Vehmeier's name is probably written on the back of that image – I've got an account to that website so I could probably message him if you'd like. As for the table, I must say I do like it :) – considering the vast majority of CFB coach bios have it, I'd prefer it stay, but I would still be fine removing it if you'd like. Also, thanks for cleaning up the quote box; that works. BeanieFan11 (talk) 17:20, 7 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Sounds good to me, passing. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 17:24, 7 September 2023 (UTC)