Talk:Freddy Huayta/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: BritneyErotica (talk · contribs) 15:57, 31 August 2023 (UTC)

Hi! Thank you for your patience. I will address these tomorrow. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 02:11, 7 September 2023 (UTC)


 * Everything is looking good so far. The entire "After completing his term of military service, Huayta settled in the city of Oruro, where he started a family and took on various of odd jobs. He played as an amateur musician in his early years before settling into a career as a police officer between 1991 and 1996. He later retired to work in commerce as a carrier,f a job he also felt unfulfilled in." seems to be unreferenced. I understand it is reference 6 that supports this, but I'd recommend putting a citation for these sentences at the end before "Starting in 1999..." as that has it's own citation and could appear confusing/or that the first part is not supported. To clarify, it would be repeating citation 6 twice in that paragraph to ensure clarity. Also slight issue "carrier,f a job...".
 * I may have made a mistake and clicked on the wrong link with the other referencing comment as I can see it is clearly supported (pp. 222, 286). "Boosted" and "won" are acceptable in this context. BritneyErotica (talk) 13:16, 11 September 2023 (UTC)
 * I see. I put it after "1999" because the Gonzales Salas source is the only one that supports it. I went ahead and moved the original citation and added a new one. Fixed typo. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:24, 11 September 2023 (UTC)
 * One more thing I've noticed is that the Commission assignments should be in chronological order unless there's a specific reason you've put them in that order (earliest first). I'm not familiar with the specific structure of these commissions but I'm assuming that in each commission the committee is where he actually served and that's why it's indented and below each one? BritneyErotica (talk) 14:49, 12 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Yeah, so I opted to order commissions not chronologically but by – for lack of a better term – "seniority". From what I've seen, it appears that Bolivian parliamentary commissions have a set order of precedence. You can actually see this in the sources themselves, with the list always starting with "Constitution, Legislation, and Electoral System" and ending with "Amazon Region". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 19:31, 12 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Any updates? Krisgabwoosh (talk) 15:13, 20 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Sorry I've been super busy. I've just read over everything again including the references and it's all good.
 * My only concern with the order is that it may not be clear (see MOS:LISTORG). While your current style makes sense, opting for a structure such as chronology makes more sense when accomodating for a broad audience (and because there are dates involved). If you can come up with a solution that accommodates your style that would also be great.
 * Once this small thing is solved I'll be happy to pass it. BritneyErotica (talk) 16:11, 20 September 2023 (UTC)
 * The only solution I could think of would be to link them, as is done on articles on U.S. congressmen. Problem is, there are no articles on Bolivian parliamentary commissions, and creating one for each hardly seems worthwhile. I could add a list of commissions to the Chamber of Senators (Bolivia) and Chamber of Deputies (Bolivia) articles – citing the ranking order there – and redirect to them. Would that be sufficient? Krisgabwoosh (talk) 21:25, 20 September 2023 (UTC)
 * I should point out that in the John McCain example, the committee assignments are ordered in alphabetic order ("Committee on"... A, then H, then I ("In"... D then T). I do think "seniority" may be hard to quantify unless there was an explicit government source that outlined that (even then that would add another layer of complication when reading).
 * While I think your current order does make sense, I also think that to be consistent with GA's (or even the Featured Article you provided), that a more popular form of organisation should be chosen (i.e., alphabetic or chronological). BritneyErotica (talk) 07:24, 21 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Fair enough. I've gone ahead and ordered it chronologically. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 15:35, 21 September 2023 (UTC)
 * All looks good now (references, copyright and expression). I'll go ahead and pass it. BritneyErotica (talk) 11:18, 22 September 2023 (UTC)