Talk:Frederick Langenheim/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

Shall review this. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * Wikilink Niagra Falls in the lead
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Early life

 * Is there any information about his parents?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:55, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Mid life and career

 * "Langenheim and his brother William began working in 1840" - I believe the text in bold might be better off placed at the start or the end of the sentence it is part of
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "Langenheim acquired a daguerreotype camera in 1841 from Von Voigtlander" - the text in bold is better off placed at the end of this text
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink photography studio to the relevant article
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Philadelphia Exchange Building to the appropriate article
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Mention who Louis Jacques Mandé Daguerre to the uninitiated
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "The seventh set was given to United States president James Knox Polk.[15] The eighth set was retained by the Langenheim brothers.[10]" - consider merging these two sentences together
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "There were eight phases taken of different time sequences.[27] They are the earliest known eclipse pictures taken in the United States.[28]" - merging both these sentences might help things here
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "1.25 inches high by 1 inch wide (3.2 cm × 2.5 cm)" - would believe the undefined undefined is still better than writing it out in plain
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "2.8125 inches high by 2.3125 inches wide (7.2 cm × 5.9 cm)" - same issue as above
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "(2.8125 inches high" - the opening parentheses isn't needed here
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Later life and death

 * Added the place where Langenheim died in the sentence mentioning the date of his death
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)