Talk:Frederick Seguier Drake/GA1

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Nominator: 07:04, 14 May 2024 (UTC)


 * @Generalissima After reading the article, here are my comments! I can definitely say he's a certified loverboy to his wife Dora 💙. Arconning (talk) 15:07, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
 * @Arconning I think I fixed up everything  :3 Generalissima (talk) (it/she)  21:36, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
 * @Generalissima Just decided to be bold and edit a tiny piece of text out. Everything looks okay and will be passing! Arconning (talk) 02:10, 19 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 15:11, 17 May 2024 (UTC)


 * I will be reviewing this article, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Wonder if this Drake's a certified loverboy too. Arconning (talk · contribs)

Lead

 * was a Chinese-born, just a quick question, is his nationality ambiguous so that Chinese-born British isn't put?
 * I could not find a source which explicitly calls him British, even though he certainly was... But it turns out one of the sources I already use calls him English, so, yes much better put. - G
 * throughout occupation, throughout the occupation. Grammatically correct originally but that's just my suggestion^^ It's alright if not followed.
 * Flows better with a the, I think you're right. - G
 * by which point Drake, change by to at.
 * Good point. - G
 * a position as the Professor of Chinese Studies, remove the.
 * Fixed. - G
 * and foundation of what would become the University Museum and Art Gallery., add the before foundation.
 * Fixed. - G

Biography lead

 * On 13 April, 1892,, remove comma after April. See Manual of Style/Dates and numbers.
 * Oops, yeah. Fixied. - G
 * He was enrolled in the University of London, replace in with at.
 * Fixed. - G
 * Drake thought favorably of the experience, and, remove comma.

Japanese occupation

 * while Dora and the child remained in England., no problems with the sentence, just think it's funny to put their son as "the child". True enough so no issues with it.
 * Possibly say the reason why the major anti-British political campaign happened, most likely because of the Tientsin incident.

Chinese Civil War and aftermath

 * after the end of the war,, remove comma.
 * Fixed. - G
 * it as a "island held by guerrillas [...], an island.
 * Fixed. - G

Hong Kong

 * He died on 21 August, 1974., remove comma per Manual of Style/Dates and numbers.
 * Fixed. - G

Published works

 * Never seen this type of section but the formatting looks great to me. Image supplied is great! (Maybe put a lang-zh and pinyin template).
 * That is a lang-zh template :3

Refs

 * Good sources, first time seeing a Bible verse as a note properly!

Spotchecks

 * Manual and automated spotcheck show nothing. Pass.

Images

 * Images have proper licenses and have suitable captions!

Misc.

 * Broad information about the main topic, no ongoing edit war, focused on the topic. Really nice work!