Talk:French battleship Brennus/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 18:35, 12 July 2012 (UTC)


 * review
 * "After Aube's retirement, the plans for the ships were reworked entirely, for the ships that were actually completed, though they are sometimes conflated." - what does this sentence mean?
 * It means that the plans for the original Brennus were basically redone for this Brennus, but that some people think they're the same ship. See if what I added makes this clearer.
 * "This may be due to the fact that both of the ships named Brennus were built in the same shipyard, and material assembled for the first vessel was used in the construction of the second"
 * can this sentence be simplified? e.g. "Since both ships named Brennus were built in the same shipyard, the same material was used to assemble each?" or something similar?
 * Well, that wording would require merging it with the previous sentence, which would then be pretty long. Take a look at how it reads now.


 * "Brennus formed the basis for the subsequent group of five broadly similar battleships built to the same design specifications, begun with Charles Martel, though they reverted to the armament layout of the earlier Magentas.
 * Could this be clearer? What was the armament layout that they reverted to?
 * See how it reads now.


 * "water-tube boilers" -  What is the significance of using these?
 * Water-tube boilers are a type of boiler, it's just a more specific link than boiler.


 * in the photo, which one is Admiral François Ernest Fournier?
 * Hmm, the image page doesn't say, and neither we nor the French wiki have an article on Fournier to compare images.
 * "At the time, Brennus was the flagship of the Mediterranean Squadron, under Vice Admiral Fournier. On 10 August off Cape St. Vincent, while returning from the maneuvers maneuvers, she collided with the destroyer Framée.
 * In the lede it sounds like the Brennus was relegated to the Reserve Squadron when the collision occurred.
 * Clarified
 * "By 1903, Brennus was transferred to the Reserve Squadron, along with three other battleships and three armored cruisers" whereas in 1900 she rammed the destroyer? Or am I getting mixed up?


 * "Fournier was the commander in chief of the annual summer maneuvers, which began in late June and concluded on 4 August" - does this refer to 1907 or also the years through 1907?
 * Just 1907.

MathewTownsend (talk) 19:01, 12 July 2012 (UTC)


 * ok, i made one more copy edit that you're free to revert. MathewTownsend (talk) 14:08, 13 July 2012 (UTC)

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