Talk:French battleship Mirabeau/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ealdgyth (talk · contribs) 17:19, 26 July 2012 (UTC)


 * I'll be reviewing this article shortly. Ealdgyth - Talk 17:19, 26 July 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Just a few spots of prose that could use some polish
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Lead:
 * "...in the late 1900s." is a bit ambigous - it can mean either the last part of the decade from 1900 to 1909 OR the last part of the century of the 1900's. While it's clear later on what is meant, is there a better way to phrase this to remove all ambiguity?
 * How does it read now?
 * Picky, and not required to pass, but is there a way to italicize Mirabeau in the title? And isn't the title a bit odd compared to most other warships? Do the French not do prefixes? If they don't, wouldn't it be "Mirabeau (French battleship)"?
 * Finally figured out how to italicize the article name. WP:Ships has its own naming convention that runs counter to the rest of Wiki if there is no suffix to use. See WP:NCSHIP
 * Links for "German, Austro-Hungarian and Turkish"?
 * Done
 * "She did, however, participate in the Allied attempt to ensure Greek acquiescence to Allied operations in Macedonia in late.." A bit too many "allied"s here - could we remove the first one?
 * Your wish is my command.
 * Wow. Can you teach my spouse how to obey like that? It'd be nice if he quit leaving his socks all over... Ealdgyth - Talk 18:12, 29 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Design:
 * "They were not well liked by the navy,.." should we be clear that this is the French navy?
 * Done.
 * Career:
 * "(Président de la République française)," really don't need this here - it's not at all relevant to the actual subject of the article. Same for "(Président du Conseil),"
 * Done.
 * World War I:
 * "in the distant blockade of the" what's a distant blockade? It must have some significance because you didn't just say "blockade"...
 * I added a link to blockade in the lede to allow the readers to figure that out. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:48, 28 July 2012 (UTC)
 * I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth - Talk 17:32, 26 July 2012 (UTC)
 * everything looks good, passing now. Ealdgyth - Talk 18:12, 29 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Done.
 * World War I:
 * "in the distant blockade of the" what's a distant blockade? It must have some significance because you didn't just say "blockade"...
 * I added a link to blockade in the lede to allow the readers to figure that out. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:48, 28 July 2012 (UTC)
 * I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth - Talk 17:32, 26 July 2012 (UTC)
 * everything looks good, passing now. Ealdgyth - Talk 18:12, 29 July 2012 (UTC)