Talk:French cruiser Jurien de la Gravière/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 22:57, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

I'll start this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:57, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
 * No DABs
 * What evidence is there that File:Soissons. 2e grande canonnière fluviale. Pièce de 164.7 - Fonds Berthelé - 49Fi379 (cropped).jpg has been published? PD-old-70 suffices.
 * None, but it appears the images in that collection were uploaded with some sort of template that I don't really want to mess with. It should probably be PD-US-1996 (but I don't think they use that on Commons)
 * I take your point
 * the southern coast of the Ottoman Empire A little too vague. Anatolia, the Levant, what?
 * Clarified
 * Move the link for long ton to the first use
 * Done
 * Each engine was placed in individual engine rooms. singular-plural disagreement
 * Fixed
 * Link foremast
 * Is there a point to that? Foremast just redirects to mast (sailing), which is already linked
 * I'd missed the earlier link.
 * cruising range was to have been was to have been?
 * Fixed
 * Umm, Her cruising range 9,300 nautical miles
 * Gotta keep you on your toes, eh? At least that's what I'm telling myself
 * proximity alert for propulsion system in the first para of the service section
 * Fixed
 * Work on the ship was completed in 1903 The reader already knows that the year is 1903, rephrase
 * Good idea
 * Upon entering service in 1903, Jurien de la Gravière was assigned to the Atlantic Naval Division, along with the armored cruiser Dupleix; she replaced the protected cruiser D'Estrées awkward and missing a period
 * Fixed
 * Some repetion in the 2nd para of the service section: By 1904, she had been assigned to the Atlantic Division with the armored cruiser Dupleix
 * Reworded
 * Clarify that the builder was the Arsenal de Lorient
 * Done
 * She remained in the unit the following year, and was activated to take part in the annual fleet maneuvers that began on 17 July and lasted for a week. 1911 or 1912?
 * Clarified
 * activated to join the active proximity alert
 * Fixed
 * Alexandretta isn't in Egypt
 * Should have been Alexandria - don't know how I typed the other one
 * Trailing comma after Italy
 * Good catch
 * the two squadrons arrived What squadrons?
 * Fixed
 * Be consistent about using SMS for A-H ships
 * Done
 * Missed one in the lede
 * Whoops
 * Got a first name for Mornet?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:29, 9 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Looks to have been Charles. Thanks Sturm. Parsecboy (talk) 20:29, 12 August 2020 (UTC)
 * protect it on lengthy from biofouling
 * Done
 * What kind of ship is USS Yankee?
 * Added
 * Link Metropolitan France, Bône, Philippeville, Montenegro--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:28, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * You're just trying to stretch this out, aren't you? Parsecboy (talk) 19:57, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * I think that we were both unpleasantly surprised by what we missed in the first round--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 12:58, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * No kidding, but then I'm always unpleasantly surprised by what I manage to screw up ;) Parsecboy (talk) 13:08, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * You and me both!--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:24, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * And then there's this, which we both missed! Parsecboy (talk) 17:48, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Details, mon ami, mere details!--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:59, 14 August 2020 (UTC)