Talk:French submarine Y/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 19:15, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

Happy to review this one. AM

Lead section / infobox

 * stricken – (here and in the text of the article) ‘struck’? (“Stricken” usually refers to something being struck down by something bad, e.g. a disease or a blow.)
 * True, but my sources specifically use stricken.
 * Understood. AM


 * The ‘Total ships scrapped=1’ line in the infobox seems unnecessary, as information to tell readers the machine was scrapped is provided.
 * I have uploaded an image at Wikicommons here, which I think could be included in the article.
 * That's actually X, not Y. I did forget to upload a plan of Y's hull showing her torpedo installation, which is about the only out-of-copyright image that I've been able to find.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 09:46, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Apologies, the online source labelled it as Y. Amitchell125 (talk) 10:51, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Nothing to apologize for.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 11:14, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

1 Background and description

 * Consider linking diesel engine; combustion.
 * Diesel is linked in the lede, combustion added
 * Replace the link for overall length with Length overall.
 * Good catch
 * 44.9 metres (147 ft 4 in) – I haven’t seen these units linked for a long time—are the links needed here?
 * No, not at all
 * Y had an overall length – the text in this paragraph should be amended so that Y is properly introduced. I would start the sentence with something like ‘Y was a single-hulled submarine that had an overall length’.
 * I'm not at all sure that it's necessary since Y is introduced in the lede as a submarine.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 09:59, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I am sure. The main article isn't a continuation of the lead section, and so it should be explained what Y is where it is first mentioned in the main text. Amitchell125 (talk) 10:45, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 11:16, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

2 Construction and career

 * Link commissioned (as in the lead); Gaston Thomson.
 * If it's linked in the lede, I see no point to link it again, especially for such a short article.
 * the Navy Minister – consider amending to ‘the French Navy Minister’, for the sake of clarity.
 * This seems unnecessary as what other country's Navy Minister could it be?
 * Unlink decommissioned (disambiguation page, and not imo needed).
 * Done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 10:05, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

On hold
I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 24 August to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 06:58, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Passing
Nice work, passing now. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 11:41, 16 August 2023 (UTC)