Talk:Fresh Bones/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 05:02, 16 February 2012 (UTC)

Will review soon.  Ruby  2010/  2013  05:02, 16 February 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Comments

 * "After Private Jack McAlpin crashes his car into a tree after two separate hallucinatory incidents, a voodoo symbol drawn on it." Fragmented sentence
 * "In North Carolina, an agitated United States Marine Corps private, Jack McAlpin, after several hallucinatory episodes, drives his car into a tree and is apparently killed." Kind of a disjointed sentence. Maybe change to "In North Carolina, an agitated United States Marine Corps private named Jack McAlpin experiences several hallucinatory episodes and drives his car into a tree; he is apparently killed."
 * "...but sees blood coming out of his ham" Just wanted to make sure this was written correctly; his ham? Yikes!
 * "Scully cuts herself on the hand..." -> Scully cuts her hand
 * Who is Dunham? Who introduce him out of nowhere (I immediately thought of my Dunham (-: )
 * Wikilink Daniel Benzali in production section
 * "While he didn't look like a military man, the producers felt he had the quality they were looking for in the role." The first part is subjective (who says he didn't look like a military man?)
 * "The sequence where a man came out of Scully's hand and strangled her came about by using a mechanical hand which the actor stuffed his gelatine covered fingers through". What male actor? I thought we were talking about Scully (Gillian Anderson)?
 * What is a sump pump? Is there a relevant wikilink?
 * 10.8 or 10.9 million households?
 * "The episode was the highest rated episode of the first two seasons" -> "Fresh Bones" was the highest rated episode of the first two seasons
 * "In their book, X-Treme possibility, authors Keith Topping and Paul Cornell ..." Should X-Treme possibility be italicized? And is possibility meant to not be capitalized?
 * ❌  Ruby  2010/  2013  19:08, 17 February 2012 (UTC)


 * "...gave the episode a B- and a more mixed reviewing..." reviewing -> review
 * The AV Club quote has a " ' issue

On hold for seven days while above comments get addressed. Thanks,  Ruby  2010/  2013  03:50, 17 February 2012 (UTC)
 * OK, I believe I've fixed all the issues!--Gen. Quon (talk) 04:09, 17 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Oh, whoops, sorry, missed that one. Now, I believe they're all fixed. Also, side note: I'd love an X-Files/Fringe cross-over... somehow.--Gen. Quon (talk) 21:15, 17 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Vaguely related, there is a wealth of X-Files/Twin Peaks crossover fan fiction out there. GRAPPLE   X  22:08, 17 February 2012 (UTC)
 * There have also been a number of Twin Peaks and X-Files references in various Fringe episodes (but it'd be cool if Mulder and Scully actually stopped by!) Anyways, article looks good. Passing for GA. Nice work,  Ruby  2010/  2013  04:24, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Well, there was that excellent 30 Days of Night/X-Files graphic novel, so I suppose anything is possible. Thanks for reviewing!--Gen. Quon (talk) 05:00, 18 February 2012 (UTC)