Talk:Fresno Yosemite International Airport/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 1.02 editor (talk · contribs) 03:58, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

I'll be taking this review expect comments soon 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 03:58, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

A big cause of concern about this article is the large amount of unsourced text. I have added cn and cn span tags around the article for easier identification, and I ask you to help me spot texts that I've missed out while referencing. Thanks. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 11:57, 13 March 2018 (UTC)


 * I have added the requested references and rewrote sections where citations could not be easily found. There is one citation request I'll push back on...
 * "At the turn of the 21st century, the city began an ambitious series of projects that would expand and completely remodel the airport."
 * I do not believe a citation is not necessary for that. It's just a summary sentance and the next four paragraphs are spent expanding on that thought. Those paragraphs have citations.
 * Ok, could you paraphrase the sentence instead as it may be controversial/promotional. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 02:29, 14 March 2018 (UTC)


 * Thank you for taking up this GA review and I look forward to any more suggestions you may have. --RickyCourtney (talk) 20:13, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

Detailed

 * 'Fresno is the largest... not served by southwest' -the sentence sound like a trivia and is discouraged from articles
 * im not that experienced in aviation articles but con the airlines and destinations section be merged with statistics?
 * Annual passenger traffic -> can it be arranged in chronological order?
 * also, the highway section of transportation sounds like a guide. Could you remove excess details?

Responses
--RickyCourtney (talk) 20:10, 14 March 2018 (UTC) --RickyCourtney (talk) 08:00, 16 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Ok, could you paraphrase the sentence instead as it may be controversial/promotional.
 * Done.
 * 'Fresno is the largest... not served by southwest' -the sentence sound like a trivia and is discouraged from articles
 * Agreed. Although the fact that the airport is not served by Southwest is a sore point among locals... it does venture heavily into trivia territory.
 * im not that experienced in aviation articles but con the airlines and destinations section be merged with statistics?
 * Having airlines and destinations separated from the statistics is the style established by WikiProject Airports.
 * Annual passenger traffic -> can it be arranged in chronological order?
 * That whole section is poorly sourced and unlike other airports, Fresno does not make annual passenger traffic information easily available. I'm going to go ahead and eliminate that section until I can find more complete data.
 * also, the highway section of transportation sounds like a guide. Could you remove excess details?
 * I removed the part that mentions which freeway you take to reach which National Park. Hopefully that's what you meant.

Overall
Article looks good, all raised issues have been dealt with. Passing. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 08:46, 16 March 2018 (UTC)