Talk:Fried chicken/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:25, 2 June 2016 (UTC)

Happy to take on this. Posting my comments in a few days. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:25, 2 June 2016 (UTC)

Fairly well-written, only a few comments:


 * General
 * Two dablinks need to be fixed
 * ✅ one, as far as I can tell there are no links to "Southern fried chicken" from this page. Omni Flames   let's talk about it  12:10, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Oh, that one is listed as a dablink at the top, no issues. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 12:19, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Say either "African American" or "African-American" throughout the article.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  12:10, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Lead
 * Per WP:MOSLEAD, the lead should be three good paras long covering all the major aspects of the article.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  23:21, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Will give a thorough read once done.
 * The lead reads much better now, but the variants and racial stereotypes should also be mentioned, add a few lines.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:33, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * History
 * The section appears a bit choppy, please combine paras.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  23:41, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * We generally don't wikilink continents
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  23:32, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Would be good to add when the middle ages were.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  23:37, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * in the 18th and 19th century, in the United States Is the comma needed?
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  23:37, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * I think "lard" should be wikilinked
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  23:37, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Source for the 3rd para?
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  23:45, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * among both blacks and whites Should we call them so even when we talk of the present day?
 * ✅ removed this bit. Omni Flames   let's talk about it  00:36, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * The economic/caloric necessity...today's fried chicken. Still appears unsourced.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  08:40, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * I see a bit of overciting at the end of the fourth para.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:07, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Can this section be illustrated to make it more interesting? Perhaps with an image of lard?
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:07, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Description
 * Can this section be expanded? Are there no other sources that can describe its composition and impact on health?
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  00:17, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Convert templates for 40 grams, 12 grams
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:13, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Source for last line of 2nd para?
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:15, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * is filled with fat  I think "consists mainly of fat" sounds more proper here.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:13, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * monosodium glutamate (or MSG), which is a dangerous acid Can you include something on its effects on health?
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:19, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * in any of the methods described above I think you refer to the methods in the next section. Should the last para then belong to "Preparation"?
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:19, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Preparation
 * The section appears a bit choppy, please combine paras.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  00:35, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Paras 1, 2, 4 and 5 are unsourced.
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  00:34, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Not quite. See the paras, they do not end with the proper inline citations. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 07:33, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:27, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 *  The batter can/may contain  "can" should be enough
 * ✅ Omni Flames   let's talk about it  00:21, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Why is Chicken Maryland mentioned separately? It is just like any other variety.
 * ✅ moved into the global variants section. Omni Flames   let's talk about it  00:20, 4 June 2016 (UTC)

Rest looks good. No copyvio detected. Images are in order. The above addressed, I would be happy to promote this. Cheers, Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 11:37, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I'll try to clean this up and hopefully I'll get back to you in a few days. Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:57, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * I've finished fixing everything you brought up here. Omni Flames   let's talk about it  00:38, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks. I have added a few more comments. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 07:33, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Sainsf, I've hopefully resolved these issues now. Let me know if there's anything still withstanding that needs to be fixed. Omni Flames   let's talk about it  11:33, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Awesome! This can be promoted now. Great job! Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 11:49, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Great! Thank you, Sainsf for such a thorough review. Omni Flames   let's talk about it  23:04, 4 June 2016 (UTC)