Talk:Friedrich Wilhelm von Seydlitz/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:26, 29 April 2017 (UTC)

This article is in good shape. A few comments:
 * I assume he was a Generalleutnant, suggest linking it ✅
 * suggest "Mad Margrave" consistently throughout rather than a mix of italics and scare quotes
 * suggest linking subaltern ✅
 * suggest choosing Pour le Merite or Pour le Mérite and keeping it consistent, including in the infobox
 * suggest Seydlitz was born on 3 February 1721, in Kalkar in the Duchy of Cleves, where his father was stationed. His father, Daniel Florian Seydlitz, was a major of Prussian cavalry with the Curassier Regiment Markgraf Friedrich Wilhelm of Brandenburg-Schwedt No. 5. The "Curassier Regiment" should probably have initial caps, as it appears to be the proper name of the Regiment.  ✅
 * there is a space before Note 2 ✅
 * repetition re apt and aptly. Suggest "well" for the latter ✅
 * there is an inconsistency about the Markgraf's given name, in the unit title he is Wilhelm, when introduced he is William
 * suggest and a nephew otherwise it is a bit confusing about who the nephew was
 * if the Old Dessauer isn't mentioned again, suggest deleting mention of his nickname, it doesn't seem to add anything
 * "Mad" Margrave should probably be "Mad Margrave" if that is what he was called
 * link horsemanship at first mention ✅
 * as a page to the Mad Margrave should probably be as a page to the Margrave, as it is currently a little too informal ✅
 * consistency with Cürassier and Curassier, and link at first mention ✅
 * perhaps explicitly point out that he was appointed as a cornet in his father's old regiment rather than use an abbreviated unit title ✅ but earlier in the paragraph also mentions that this was his father's old regiment.  Now it's mentioned twice' isn't that a bit overkill?
 * suggest Several times Seydlitz came to the notice of the King ✅
 * the Prussian line
 * link Habsburg monarchy at the first mention of Austrian ✅
 * cuirassier and coup d'œil are overlinked
 * link hussars at first mention ✅
 * should Count Nassau be redlinked? Or would be not be notable?
 * suggest Seydlitz served through the Second Silesian War as you have just talked about another man
 * there are two mentions of his promotion to major, suggest linking major and combining them ✅
 * should Count Burghausen be redlinked? Not clear who it is, so took it out
 * suggest He developed tactics for cavalry that included hussars, cuirassiers and dragoons, and presented them to the King. or something similar ✅
 * suggest They had to be capable ✅
 * suggest and be prepared ✅
 * suggest with accuracy or reloaded ✅
 * suggest pattern for the rest ✅
 * where they regrouped ✅
 * At the Prussian debacle and on 14 October 1758 same with the next date ✅
 * in the Berlin✅
 * it isn't clear what happen to his health "undermined by his experience with the Margrave"? syphilis removed, mentioned later.  ✅
 * and was divorced needs a full stop ✅
 * His early biographer ✅
 * but his biographer Bernhard Poten ✅
 * in Berlin, honoring needs a space dropped ✅
 * the Memorials section should probably be rolled into one para ✅
 * the licensing of File:Friedrich wilhelm von seydlitz.jpg needs work, File:Major General von Seydlitz pipe Prussian cavalry Battle of Rossbach Richard Knötel.jpg needs a PD-US tag, as does File:Seydlitz at Rossbach.jpg
 * these are fixed. I swapped out the one in the info box for one with better attributes. auntieruth (talk) 18:57, 1 May 2017 (UTC)
 * File:FriedrichWilhelmvonSeydlitz.jpg needs a PD-US tag, as does File:1872 Lulves Standbild Generals von Seydlitz anagoria.JPG. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:51, 2 May 2017 (UTC)

That's me done. Placing on hold for comments to be addressed. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:20, 1 May 2017 (UTC)
 * there is an unclosed pair of square brackets in the infobox ✅
 * Thank you. Comments addressed I think. I added a mite on family.  auntieruth (talk) 18:57, 1 May 2017 (UTC)
 * - just the two US-PD tags (above) to do. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:57, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * they are already there. PD-old-auto-1923|1815 shows up as public domain in US auntieruth (talk) 22:40, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * I thought PD-old was insufficient, a separate PD-US tag is needed, is it not? That is what the template indicates. Perhaps can advise. Cheers, Peacemaker67  (click to talk to me) 23:55, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * PD-old-auto-1923 provides a US PD tag automatically, but the two images flagged above on 2 May do not use that tag - they should if it applies, or another US PD tag if it does not. Nikkimaria (talk) 00:27, 4 May 2017 (UTC)
 * I had already used PD-old-auto-1923|1815}} and PD-old-auto-1923|1814}} on the images, which should have sufficed, right? I added the tag Nikkimaria gave too, but it simply gives the same text, but not as much detail.  anyway, it's done.   and, please advise....  auntieruth (talk) 14:23, 4 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Is it possible we're not talking about the same images? I'm looking at File:FriedrichWilhelmvonSeydlitz.jpg and File:1872_Lulves_Standbild_Generals_von_Seydlitz_anagoria.JPG, both of which have only PD-old. Nikkimaria (talk) 00:25, 5 May 2017 (UTC)
 * LOL, of course different files. PD-old-auto-1923|creator's death added to both of those auntieruth (talk) 14:24, 5 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Ok, all good now, passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:42, 6 May 2017 (UTC)