Talk:Future Nostalgia (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 14:56, 22 June 2020 (UTC)

After your reviewing of my article "Wouldn't Leave", I'll follow up by taking this on. --Kyle Peake (talk) 14:56, 22 June 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
✅ all
 * Cover art needs alt text
 * WP:OVERLINK of Dua Lipa under Songwriter(s)
 * Target to Future Nostalgia should solely be on "of the same name"
 * "included as the album's opening track" → "included as the opening track" since we know that's on the album
 * "It was released on 13 December 2019" → "It was released for digital download and streaming on 13 December 2019"
 * Target promotional single to Promotional recording
 * "from Future Nostalgia as well as being serviced" → "from the album, while serviced"
 * "the same day" → "that same day"
 * ""Future Nostalgia" is a" → "the song is a"
 * "electro and funk" → "electro, and funk"
 * "song containing elements" → "track that contains elements"
 * The critical reception sentence should start the second para instead
 * "Upon its release, "Future Nostalgia" entered official" → "Upon its release, the song debuted on record"
 * "UK downloads" → "UK Downloads" with the appropriate target
 * Target music critics to Music journalism
 * "After the release of its parent album" → "Following the release of Future Nostalgia" since italicisation clearly shows it is about the album instead
 * "Slovakia and Spain" → "Slovakia, and Spain"
 * "from music critics with many commenting on the song's" → "from music critics, with many commenting on the"
 * "It received a lyric video on" → "A lyric video was released for it on"

Writing and production
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 * "Lipa alongside Clarence Coffee Jr" → "Lipa, alongside Clarence Coffee Jr."
 * "how they wanted work together" → "how they wanted to work together"
 * "They had not worked together previously, although, Lipa" → "The two had not collaborated previously, although Lipa"
 * "a fan of his due" → "a fan of Bhasker due"
 * "some sessions with him" → "some sessions together"
 * "overly confident as well as" → "overly confident, as well as"
 * "then suggested that they attempt" → "then suggested them attempting"
 * "something bold so Bhasker" → "something bold, so Bhasker"
 * Target experimental to Experimental music
 * "and Lipa began writing down lyrics" → "and she began writing down lyrics"
 * "half of the song, they got" → "half of "Future Nostalgia", the two of them got"
 * "so Lipa called Clarence Coffee Jr" → "which lead to Lipa calling Clarence Coffee Jr."
 * "they came up with" does this refer to those three studio members or the two music artists?
 * This refers to all three studio members.
 * Copyedited for you --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:13, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
 * "Lipa placed it as" → "Lipa decided on placing the song as"
 * "due to it's fearlessness" → "due to its fearlessness"

Music and lyrics
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 * Target chorus to Refrain on the audio sample text, feminist to Feminism and wikilink Falsetto to itself
 * "by Lipa as well as" → "by Lipa, as well as"
 * Add ref(s) on the sample's text for verifying that info even though it is already written out in the section's prose
 * Target chorus to Refrain
 * Wikilink post-chorus to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Target bridge to Bridge (music)
 * "It's verses only use one chord, D5, while the song" → "The verses use solely the D5 chord, while the track" with the target
 * Target synths to Synthesizer
 * [14][15][16][17][18] is too many refs next to each other; like you have done for [13], place them after the relevant info where there is commas
 * Add wikilink on drum machines
 * "features a rhythm guitar" → "features rhythm guitar" with the wikilink
 * "to D5 and she makes" → "to D5, and she makes"
 * "spoken-word verses as well as" → "spoken word verses as well as" with the wikilink
 * [12][5][20] should be in numerical order
 * "backing vocals courtesy of the song's producer, Jeff Bhasker, where" → "backing vocals, courtesy of Bhasker, where"
 * [22][16] should be in numerical order
 * "the song deals with themes of" → "the song's lyrics deal with the themes of"
 * "wrote about "Future Nostalgia"'s lyrics" → "wrote about the lyrics"
 * [24][18] should be in numerical order

Release and promotion
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 * Wikilink lead single to itself
 * "from her second studio album Future Nostalgia (2020)" → "from her second studio album Future Nostalgia"
 * "it's video release" → "its music video release"
 * Target promotional single to Promotional recording
 * "in every region.[28] It was released" → "in every region, being released"
 * [2][28] should both be solely at the end of the sentence, since it will be the two current ones merged
 * Add ""Future Nostalgia" was later included as the first track on Future Nostalgia, released on 26 March 2020" as the first para's last sentence with the ref
 * ""Future Nostalgia" received a lyric video that premiered on" → "An accompanying lyric video was released that premiered through"
 * "It takes place in a retro" → "It is set in a retro"
 * "house in a white shirt" → "house, wearing a white shirt"
 * "underwear as well as" → "underwear, as well as"
 * Remove the last sentence since YouTube is constantly updating views

Critical reception
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 * "received mixed to positive reviews from music critics" → "was met with mixed to positive reviews from music critics" with the target
 * "what lies ahead"." → "what lies ahead.""
 * "He went on to describe it" → "He continued, describing the song"
 * Target pop to Pop music
 * "as "self-assured" and" → "as "self-assured," and"
 * "soundscape" as well as calling it" → "soundscape," while calling it"
 * "from it's parent album" → "from the album"
 * "In Nylon, Allison Stubblebine wrote" → "Stubblebine wrote"
 * "as well a categorizing the song's" → "and categorized the song's"
 * The Guardian should be italicised
 * "Thomas Stichbury called it" → "Thomas Stichbury labelled it"
 * ""it’s a flirty wink" → ""it's a flirty wink"
 * Remove target on Clash
 * "a positive review saying Lipa" → "a positive review, saying Lipa"
 * "its talk-rapped verses" and that" → "its talk-rapped verses," and that"
 * "praising it's production and lyrics" → "praising its production and lyrics"
 * "criticized "Future Nostalgia" writing that" → "criticized "Future Nostalgia", writing that"
 * "her vocals but praised" → "her vocals, but praised"
 * "to compare it to" → "to compare it to the music of"
 * "listed it as a notable track from it's parent album" → "listed the song as a notable track from Future Nostalgia"
 * "Writing for the" → "For the"
 * "one of the album’s" → "one of the album's"
 * "Writing for Business Insider" → "For Business Insider"
 * "called it" → "called the song"
 * "on to state that it" → "on to state that the song"
 * "a single," it's" → "a single" but it is" with the target
 * "categorized Lipa confident and" → "categorized Lipa as confident, while he"
 * PopSugar are a gossip website and not a reputable music critic, so remove this review.
 * "calling the chorus" → "calling the song's chorus"
 * "Writing for Rolling Stone" → "For Rolling Stone"
 * "called "Future Nostalgia"" → "called the song"
 * "as well as comparing it to" → "and compared it to the music of"
 * "DIY and Variety both" → "Writers of both DIY and Variety"
 * [43][16] should be put in numerical order
 * "In a mixed review from" → "In a mixed review for"
 * "backing and one of her" → "backing and one of Lia's"
 * "Lipa's vocal style to" → "Lipa's vocal style to that of"
 * "Nick Smith called it" → "Nick Smith called the song"
 * "brassy" and went on" → "brassy," and went on"
 * wikilinked Brassy to Brass instruments
 * "compared the song to" → "compared the song to the music of"
 * "with it's lyrics and" → "with the lyrics and"
 * Wikilink God Is in the TV to itself
 * "compared it to" → "compared the song to"

Personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between personnel ✅

Charts

 * Weekly chart performance for "Future Nostalgia" → Chart performance for "Future Nostalgia" because there is no year-end chart(s) ✅

Release history

 * Format → Format(s) ✅

Final comments and verdict

 * until the issues are fixed, nice to review one of your articles though and I look forward to doing more in the future. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:23, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
 * , thank you so much for reviewing this article. I have addressed all the issues above. Is there anything else you would like me to do? LOVI  33  20:07, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
 * That was a quick response, thanks a lot. ✅! --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:13, 24 June 2020 (UTC)