Talk:Fyodor Dostoevsky/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 20:16, 25 August 2012 (UTC)


 * Will review! MathewTownsend (talk) 20:16, 25 August 2012 (UTC)

Hi,

I'm starting with a few comments/suggestions:


 * " helping him to fight his early hallucinations possibly caused by the terrible tales and Gothic literature that enthralled the young boy." - citation? as epilepsy can be accompanied by hallucinations.


 * "He never forgot this traumatic experience." - the traumatic experience of talking to the young girl, or her traumatic experience of being raped by a lunatic?
 * The traumatic experience after seeing her death


 * "he was separated from his brother, who was later sent to Reval, Estonia, due to his poor health and the better studying conditions that were available there." - better studying conditions? unclear to me.


 * " he was brave and had a strong sense of justice, as opposed to his uncultured and brutal class fellows." is this peacocky? POV? Citation?
 * I wrote this as they were cases of strong bullying. But it seems like Dostoyevsky did not experience such because of his strong personality


 * "his classmates respected him. Dostoyevsky was called "Monk Photius" - these are the "brutish class fellows"
 * Ditto


 * "It is dubious how his father died." better wording? e.g. The circumstances of his father's death were unclear, (or they seemed unlikely?)
 * Done


 * "However, one peasant, Pavel Khotiaintsev, meant that he was killed by the other peasents, but whether it is true is unknown as he may have ruthlessly said that only to buy their land." - badly worded - should "meant" be "said"? and it's unclear who "ruthlessly said" -the peasant? - and isn't "ruthlessly" POV? Needs citation. (Classmates are "brutish" and peasants "ruthlessly said" - sounds (to me) like social class judgements are being made here.

No other reaction (besides, apparently, the seizure) of Dostoyevsky to his father's death? Now both his father and mother were dead.
 * Not that I know.


 * "After a short visit to his brother Mikhail in Reval, Fyodor often went to concerts, operas, theatres and ballets." - after one short visit, then he "often went" - needs to be clearer what is meant or what the connection is to the "short visit". Ignored his brother after that?


 * "His independence led to financial troubles." - meaning no parents, or being an adult now, or not living at the academy?
 * Independence generally


 * " and upon advice" - whose?
 * People's. Names were not named--Kürbis (✔) 08:10, 26 August 2012 (UTC)

(I will stop here as another editor is editing the article and I can't review it while this is the case, as I don't know what's what any more. I don' want to have to review again the parts I've already done. The article is too long for me to have to go over it more than once. Perhaps I will withdraw. When the article is ready i.e. it is stable, you can renominate it.)

MathewTownsend (talk) 00:29, 26 August 2012 (UTC)


 * I now see the part I've already reviewed has been changed substantially. I've left my comments above. I don't know if they still apply or not. Please renominate when the article is stable.

MathewTownsend (talk) 00:35, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
 * Sorry for interrupting with those edits, I've reverted them. I'll let you continue the review and stay off until you finish. Mark Arsten (talk) 00:41, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
 * Checking the article history, a couple of large edits remain. Therefore, I've failed the article as unstable. I'm not going to re review parts I have already copyedited and reviewed. MathewTownsend (talk) 02:01, 26 August 2012 (UTC)