Talk:Gabriel Jones (politician)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 21:23, 28 February 2014 (UTC)

Nominator: Caponer (talk)

Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  21:23, 28 February 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written
 * a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

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 * 5) ** Major Point 1: Early life and education "" ( not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body )
 * 6) ** Major Point 2: Political career "Jones served as the Clerk of Court for Hampshire County, Virginia (now West Virginia) for a tenure lasting 25 years (1757–1782) and represented Frederick, Hampshire, and Augusta counties as a member of the House of Burgesses of Virginia. In addition, Jones also served as the King's Attorney for Augusta County and as the coroner for Frederick County." (summarised well in the lead)
 * 7) ** Major Point 3: Later life and legacy "He was elected to represent Virginia at the Continental Congress, but did not attend, and was elected to represent Rockingham County in the Virginia Ratifying Convention." & "Jones was an uncle of American pioneer John Gabriel Jones (1752–1776) and he was a friend of both George Washington and Thomas Fairfax, 6th Lord Fairfax of Cameron." (summarised well in the lead)
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 * 9) ** Major Point 1: Early life and education "" ( the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body )
 * 10) ** Major Point 2: Political career "Jones served as the Clerk of Court for Hampshire County, Virginia (now West Virginia) for a tenure lasting 25 years (1757–1782) and represented Frederick, Hampshire, and Augusta counties as a member of the House of Burgesses of Virginia. In addition, Jones also served as the King's Attorney for Augusta County and as the coroner for Frederick County." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
 * 11) ** Major Point 3: Later life and legacy "He was elected to represent Virginia at the Continental Congress, but did not attend, and was elected to represent Rockingham County in the Virginia Ratifying Convention." & "Jones was an uncle of American pioneer John Gabriel Jones (1752–1776) and he was a friend of both George Washington and Thomas Fairfax, 6th Lord Fairfax of Cameron." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
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 * 14) *** Gabriel Jones (May 17, 1724 – October 1806) was an 18th-century Welsh American lawyer, legislator, court clerk, and civil servant in the colony (and later U.S. state) of Virginia.
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 * 3) ** I’d recommend that the Heading 2s Physical description and Landholdings be removed. This article establishes the notability of Gabriel Jones as "Welsh American lawyer, legislator, court clerk, and civil servant". Giving Heading 2s to his physical description and landholdings in the body appears a bit inconsistent to me. Adjust few very important and notable points from these Heading 2s in other sections, if possible. Can you think of any better approach to the one I’m suggesting?
 * 4) ** Can you convert one quote by Thomas Marshall Green in the Later life and legacy section to prose? It’s pretty short and two adjacent boxes are affecting the layout. I’m not sure about this recommendation. What do you think?
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 * Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE):
 * Convert the list to prose in the Personal life section.


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2: Verifiable with no original research
 * a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
 * b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other GAs)

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Cross-checked with other GAs: Virginia Argus and Hampshire Advertiser, Confederate Memorial (Romney, West Virginia), Wirgman Building, Wappocomo (Romney, West Virginia), Christian Streit White, Valley View (Romney, West Virginia), Alexander White (Virginia), Francis White (Virginia)


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 * 2) * Is it contentious?: No
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3: Broad in its coverage

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Cross-checked with other GAs: Virginia Argus and Hampshire Advertiser, Confederate Memorial (Romney, West Virginia), Wirgman Building, Wappocomo (Romney, West Virginia), Christian Streit White, Valley View (Romney, West Virginia), Alexander White (Virginia), Francis White (Virginia)


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 * 10) * Fix the Personal life section. It appears a bit off-topic to me. Remove the list containing the details about the children.

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4: Neutral

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5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

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 * 4) * Caption: "Jones maintained correspondences with George Washington, as evidenced in this June 6, 1777 letter written by Jones to Washington." succinct and informative

I'm glad to see your work here. The prose quality in particular has been fantastic in all your articles. As per the above checklist, I do have some insights that I think will be useful in improving the article:


 * I think the lead can be improved in order to provide an accessible overview and to give relative emphasis to the Early life and education.
 * I think the layout needs to be fixed.
 * Can you fix too many adjacent inline citations within sentences throughout the prose? They are inhibiting the flow. Why so many? One appears fine to me? Move all the inline citations towards the end of the sentence to improve the flow.

Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Caponer, please feel free to strike out any recommendation you think will not help in improving the article. All the best, --  Seabuckthorn   ♥  20:53, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Seabuckthorn, thank you for taking the time to conduct this very comprehensive and thoughtful review. I promise to address all the above issues you've listed within the next few days. Thanks again! -- Caponer (talk) 14:27, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Seabuckthorn, I've addressed all your above comments and suggestions in the article. I've added the necessary content to the lead, modified the list of children by turning that information into prose, and moved the physical description section into the personal life section. As for the landholdings, it is far too massive to move elsewhere, and a lot of its content will not fit neatly in the other sections. Is it a deal breaker if it continues to stand alone? Thanks again for the review! -- Caponer (talk) 21:33, 10 March 2014 (UTC)