Talk:Gabrielle Roth/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 11:48, 4 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Thank you very much. I'm away from my desk just now so responses may be a bit slow, but I'll do my best! Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:41, 4 August 2023 (UTC)

Happy to be challenged on any of my review comments. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:48, 4 August 2023 (UTC)

Comments
Copyvio check
 * I reviewed matches over 7% found using Earwig's Copyvio Detector. 40%+ matches with arielkarass.com and dans5rytmer.com appear to have used the Wikipedia article rather than vice versa. The Guardian match is an attributed quote. "five body rhythms: flowing, staccato, chaos, lyrical and stillness" is OK per WP:LIMITED IMO. No issues, although "a way to become conscious through dance" should probably be attributed in the text as a direct quote.
 * Noted, attributed.

Images
 * The fair use rationale for the Roth image looks appropriate. Manhattan Ensemble Theatre pic is relevant, and has a CC licence; caption and positioning are fine. Optionally, alt text could be added to the images. (MOS:ALT)
 * Noted, alt text added.

Text sections
Early life


 * Typically the birth details would be included and cited here rather than in the lead.


 * entered a depression - I don't have access to the La Cerra source, but this seems an unusual phrasing.
 * Reworded.


 * Optionally, you could vary the openings of some of the sentences in the secong paragraph (I'm looking at She entered/She became/She found)
 * Done.

Career


 * (Stockbridge, Massachusetts) - maybe "in Stockbridge, Massachusetts" ? (Similarly for (Rhinebeck, New York) and (Mercer Street, New York City)
 * Done.


 * and has taught at the - maybe "and taught at the"?
 * Fixed.


 * Roth wrote three books: not supported by the following citation, but there is a list of three later in the articel so that's OK.
 * Noted.


 * Gabrielle Roth and the Mirrors - italics aren't used for band names. (AFAIK.)
 * Fixed.


 * Roth performed and recorded as Gabrielle Roth and the Mirrors, - supported by the source, but elsewhere it looks like other musicians were involved too, rather than these being all Roth's own work. (And the subheading is "With the Mirrors")
 * She formed and led the Mirrors. I've weaked the opening text. Please feel free to copy edit here.


 * The 5Rhythms have been the subject of academic study - optionally, it might be interesting to add a bit more about these.
 * I think I'll attempt this after the GA, if that's OK.

Personal life/Works


 * The link to Sweat Your Prayers: Movement as Spiritual Practice gives me a message "Book available to patrons with print disabilities". There is another copy on Internet Archive that doesn't have that restriction. Optionally, you could change the link.
 * Changed link.

Infobox and lead


 * Spouse	Robert Ansell isn't mentioned in the body text and doesn't have a citation.
 * Added and cited.


 * Lead is quite short, but acceptable given the length of the article. Optionally you could add something from the second para of Early life, or a bit more about what Roth was looking to achieve through her work.
 * Noted.

General


 * As you'll know from past reviews, I include some comments where everything is fine, for the record.
 * Noted.
 * I made the changes suggested by a couple of scripts.Feel free to revert anything that is objectionable.
 * All fine, thanks for that!

I'm satisfied that the article meets the GA criteria so am passing it. Nice work, thanks. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:34, 5 August 2023 (UTC)