Talk:Gail Godwin/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:02, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi! Will review this. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 15:02, 27 March 2016 (UTC)

Update: A bit busy now, I think I will be able to get to this only by the end of this week. Cheers! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 18:43, 27 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Thanks! You may notice that most of the best citations are in offline print sources. If you need to take a look at any of them, I can scan them and provide digital copies by email. David King, Ethical Wiki (CorporateM) (Talk) 20:03, 27 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Hi! Found time for this. Jotting down my comments:

Lead

 * We typically exclude citations from the lead. Make sure that you have not excluded any fact of the lead from the main text. The citations should support everything in the main text.
 * ✅CorporateM (Talk) 10:20, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Two books in particular that she wrote in the 1980s I think it would be better to say "In particular, two books written by her ". (1980s is redundant as you have included years for the books.)
 * ✅CorporateM (Talk) 10:20, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Early life and family

 * Weaverville, NC and then to Asheville, NC Repetition of "NC". Is its mention needed?
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 10:27, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Godwin's grandmother filled the traditional role of a mother, cleaning, cooking and sewing I think this could be shortened to a few words.
 * while her mother Kathleen  "her mother" is redundant.
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 10:27, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 *  a Bachelor's and master's  "b" of bachelor is in lower case in the lead but not here. Needs consistency.
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 10:27, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * more so than her grandmother's work as a homemaker We already know her grandmother's work.
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 10:27, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * At age nine  "age" is redundant. Or write "Aged nine"
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 10:27, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * In 1948 Godwin's mother Kathleen married a World War II veteran named Frank Cole  Reword as "In 1948 Kathleen married Frank Cole, a World War II veteran"
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 10:27, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * When Kathleen continued writing after having a second child, Godwin was further inspired to pursue writing by her mother's determination for it Reword as "Godwin was further inspired by her mother's determination to continue writing after having a second child."
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 15:24, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Say Kathleen instead of Godwin's mother, we know who she is.
 * I prefer to use terms interchangeably to give the text more variety, but will change it if you feel strongly CorporateM (Talk) 15:26, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Kathleen eventually stopped writing. As Cole's salary increased and he was able to support the family, Godwin's mother focused on being a wife and homemaker Combine these lines.
 * ✅ 15:27, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Godwin had no relationship with her father, Mose Godwin No need to name him again
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 10:27, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Rest

 * Under Recent works, Godwin's published works have include 14 novels. Is there an error here?
 * I changed "include" -> "included" 14 novels. Wasn't sure if that's what you meant, or if there was a reason to suspect the number was wrong. CorporateM (Talk) 15:28, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Under Themes, a woman's pursuit of an artistic an career and the role of religious faith Is there an error here?
 * ✅ Ewww, thanks for catching that. I've fixed it. CorporateM (Talk) 15:29, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Under Early works, Lihong Xie comments that Has Xie been introduced earlier with an idea of his/her background?
 * ✅ Yes, about four paragraphs up in the prior section. CorporateM (Talk) 15:31, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * I think Godwin's recent image (showing her typing) should go into the infobox, where it would look better.
 * That image is from 1983; let me ask her if we can get a more recent photo. She mentioned employing the work of a photographer soon. CorporateM (Talk) 15:32, 28 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Some publications such as The Boston Globe and The Washington Post could be linked.
 * ✅ I went through the whole thing adding wikilinks wherever possible. CorporateM (Talk) 15:53, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

About the sources, they look fine and I do not feel the need to check them in the form you offered. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 10:25, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

No copyvio detected, prose well-written in the majority of the article. Great job! These issues resolved, I would be glad to promote this. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 10:41, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Thank you. All the issues are resolved now. I am glad to promote this. Cheers! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 15:49, 28 March 2016 (UTC)